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Electricity Evocation in Germany in a three-decade period, is revealed in the pie chart.


ANSOR99 10 / 6 3  
Apr 7, 2016   #1
TASK 1.
Electricity generation by source in Germany.

Answer:


A comparison of the figure of the five resources for electricity evocation in Germany between 1980 and 2010 as a projected year, a three-decade period, is revealed in the pie chart. Overall, it can be seen that natural gas and coal became the main source in 1980, while nuclear was the main resource in 2010.

By 1980, the tremendous quantity of electricity had come to both coal and natural gas of 28% for all, whereas hydro was 7 percent to be the lowest resource. Then, in the middle rate, there were two sources of electricity generation which had roughly same figure by 2%.

Moving to the pie chart in 2010, the bulk of electricity evocation went to nuclear of 155%, and then coal and petroleum witnessed to 28%, 27%, respectively. The smallest figures of electricity generation were natural gas and hydro which belonged to similar number of 2%. Interestingly, from 1980 to 2010, coal unchanged for resource's rate of electricity of 28 percent.




nurannisaputry92 36 / 27 2  
Apr 7, 2016   #2
hi ansor,

let me give you some correction:

A comparison of the figure of the five resources ... Overall, it can be seen that natural gas and coal became ...

i think, for overall, it is better to make 2 sentences.
let me modify your overview.
The nuclear dominated the resources for electricity in 2010. However, the most significant resources in 1980 was Natural gas while this number decreased sharply in the end of period.
Hadiyati Fudla 9 / 14 3  
Apr 7, 2016   #3
Hi Ansor! Nice writing. You write in great order. Let me try to give you my perspective:

1. Your introduction is well-organise. Good job.

2. the measurement is in 'units' , not 'per cent' . Cross check it again.

3. You did not put any main idea in your body paragraph. Better you add it before the detail information.

How about this:
- for body 1 :
"By 1980, the tremendous quantity of electricity had come to both coal and natural gas. Its figure for 28% in all, whereas hydro was 7 percent to be the lowest resource."

- for body 2:
"Moving to the pie chart in 2010, the bulk of electricity evocation went to nuclear. It is about 155%, and then coal and petroleum witnessed to 28%, 27%, respectively. "


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