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IELTS: electricity generated in Germany and France in the year 2009


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 25, 2014   #1
The pie shows the electricity generated from several source in Germany and France in the year 2009.

Generally, there are consisting of all type and renewable with 560 billion kilo watt hour and 510 billion kilo watt hour.

Firstly, electricity of Germany in 2009, all types were consisting of conventional thermal, nuclear, renewable which had different percentage. This was electricity of conventional thermal that increased approximately 59.6%. By contrast, nuclear and renewable had value fewer and decreased sharply rates 23 % and 17.4%. Moreover, renewable had divided consisting of highest biomass approximately 39.3%, continued wind rates 36.9%. Then, it followed by lower or decreased steadily which were hydroelectric, solar rates 17.7% and 6.1%. By contrast, geothermal had percentage 0.0%. It was lowest than others.

Secondly, electricity of France, all type were consisting of nuclear approximately 76.0% which was highest, continued to fall sharply between conventional thermal and renewable rates 10.3% and 13.7%. However, renewable had divided that was consisting of hydroelectric which was highest approximately 80.5%, continued to fall sharply that was wind, biomass, and solar rates 10.5%, 8.1%, and 0.9% respectively. By contrast, geothermal had percentage 0.0% which was lowest than others.

To sum up, the data gave information the electricity of Germany more economical than France and hydroelectric highest in France and geothermal was lowest than others.




Victory01 1 / 1  
Apr 25, 2014   #2
Thanks for the information...will love the word form of the data as well...
upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 25, 2014   #3
Generally, there are consisting of all type and renewable with 560 billion kilo watt hour and 510 billion kilo watt hour.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 26, 2014   #4
I suggest you to write more sample answers, so you will get more ideas or recommendation how to compose your report well and make the readers catch your points easier
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 26, 2014   #5
This is the second topic in the same row I share comment. As I have suggested to the previous thread, this task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills. So you need to stick to the in-depth comparisons and contrasts in presenting the charts. Hope this helps :D
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 27, 2014   #6
The pie shows the electricity generated from several source in Germany and France in the year 2009.

The pie charts show

there are 5 types of paragraph
1. Listing > your writing is following this type .
2. Sequence
2.1. Time
2.2. Process
3. Cause and effect
4. Comparison and contrast
5. Problem and solution

comparison and contrast is used to inform the writing report. So, i suggest you to make comparison and contrast in your writing.


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