at the University of Aberdeen,Lee and David Lusseau
= singular/plural issue. there are two researchers there
stated that they
, a study on September 15, supportshas supported
[pay more attention in the appropriate tenses to use
] this opinion that legalizing the ivory market would be able to
[you can also say 'possibly/plausibly
'] vanish the elephants'
It discovers which the demanding of ivory is much greater than the amount of ivory that can be harvested sustainability.*its discovery prevails that the demand of ivory ......
*it discovers that the demand of ivory.....actually, this sentence is still quite similar with the original sentence from the article. need more effort to restate it without get affected by the sentence structure of the source
Pro and cons are arisen regarding
this issue, some countries or groups who state pro and cons
[repetition. you may write 'who state their agreement and disagreement
] inregarding this issue.
Firstly, one of the authors
] a researcher at the University (...) so there is no method to harvest
['sufficient ivory' clearly has different meaning with '...ivory sufficiently' . concern about the sense of the sentence or words
] even though, in a controlled way
will not drive elephant ...
Secondly, there are three nations (Namibia, Zimbabwe, and South Africa) support this legal ivory ...
They offers a process
decision-making mechanism (...) ivory from existing government stockpiles of seized illegal ivory...to similar with the article