A researcher at the University of Aberdeen,
Lee and David Lusseau=
singular/plural issue. there are two researchers therestated that
they used .....
Therefore,in addition , a study on September 15,
supportshas supported [
pay more attention in the appropriate tenses to use] this opinion that legalizing the ivory market
would be able to [
you can also say 'possibly/plausibly '] vanish the
elephants' population.
It discovers which the demanding of ivory is much greater than the amount of ivory that can be harvested sustainability.
*its discovery prevails that the demand of ivory ......
*it discovers that the demand of ivory.....actually, this sentence is still quite similar with the original sentence from the article. need more effort to restate it without get affected by the sentence structure of the sourcePro and cons are arisen regarding
withto this issue, some countries or groups who state
pro and cons [
repetition. you may write 'who state their agreement and disagreement] in
regarding this issue.Firstly, one of the authors
' by Phylis Lee
and [
need comma] a researcher at the University (...) so there is no method to harvest
sufficient ivory
sufficiently [
'sufficient ivory' clearly has different meaning with '...ivory sufficiently' . concern about the sense of the sentence or words] even though, in a controlled way
thatit will not drive elephant ...
Secondly, there are three nations (Namibia, Zimbabwe, and South Africa) support this legal ivory ...
They offers a process
ofnamed decision-making mechanism (...) ivory from existing
government stockpiles of seized illegal ivory...to similar with the article