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Employment of youngsters would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole


trvaanh 4 / 8 1  
Apr 13, 2019   #1

Teenagers to do unpaid work



Topic Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

Voluntary work creates opportunities for the young to develop social skills as well as work wonders for their neighborhood. Although some consider that it had been better make unpaid work obligatory for adolescents I would argue that young people should be allowed to make their own decision about taking part in social activities.

Firstly, becoming a volunteer might have a negative effect on teenagers' health. In adolescent period, people could easily absorb necessary nutrition in order to stay in shape and boost brain growth. However, the young would have no time for themselves as unpaid work requires them to work full time. For example, they might have to eat junk food but not family meals while working that not provides enough energy and does harm to their body and mind.

Secondly, working without any payments steals the young chances to make money for their own goals. Teenagers can take part-time jobs or enroll in a course preparing for their future career. For instance, Mark Zuckerberg started programming when he was only 11. Thanks to his early training, the Facebook CEO became a millionaire at the age 22. It is clear that society seems to exploit the labor of teenagers if they force the young serve the community for free while they have the ability to run their own business.

In conclusion, I disagree that teenagers lose their time and effort for unpaid labor. The community should encourage the young to build better living environment by participating in social work in place of making it compulsory.

Maria [Contributor] - / 135 79  
Apr 13, 2019   #2
Are you working with a maximum word count? This can significantly change my perception of the entirety of the essay considering its current length and content. Regardless, I would say that what is lacking from your essay is primarily more in-depth discussions on your points.

I'll provide you with a couple of questions that can help guide you.
1. What specific social skills do you believe should be prioritized for teenagers? Do you believe that this is the age that should focus on honing these skills?

2. Even if the work to be done is not full-time, would you still not recommend it for teenagers?
3. What are the other mental and emotional risks involved with this voluntary work? Will this not help teenagers become better in stress management for the reduction of future risks?

4. What are these other options for the youth to make money?
5. What are the comparative long-term versus short-term results of this proposal?
You should as well expound more on the your concluding remarks. How do you propose that the community should encourage the youth to build their network through a better social environment? What would you implement to help in this task?

You should always focus on balancing your arguments to make sure that the essay follows through with its potential.
Best of luck.


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