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IELTS: Energy consumption by fuel in the USA (1980-2030) nuclear, solar, wind, hydro power


puman 6 / 13 1  
Mar 28, 2014   #1
Please, correct my grammar. I very appreciate your help.

The line graph illustrates the consumption of various sources of energy in the United State of American from 1980 to 2030.

Overall, it can be seen that petrol and oil are anticipated that will continually be the chief energy source. The consumption of the other sources will increase, except for hydropower.

There is a prediction that petrol and oil have used almost 50 quadrillion unites (50q) from 35q in 1980. The consumption of Coal and natural gas started at 15q and 20q respectively in 1980, and subsequently natural gas showed an initial decrease and coal had a gradual growth, with two fuel equal between 1985 and 1990. By 2014, both consumptions have climbed to the same number, at 25q, before that of coal will grew to 30q in 2030 and that of natural gas will level off.

Turning to remaining sources, energy from nuclear, solar and wind hydro- power were equal at 4q in 1980. Whereas the consumption of nuclear has a projection that will explode to 8q in 2030, that of hydropower experienced a fluctuation before it is forecast to remain stable at 4q in same time. Solar and wind also showed a variation between 1985 and 2010, before it has increased to 5q by 2030.




niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Mar 28, 2014   #2
energy in the United State of American

I think it is United State of America

Overall, it can be seen that petrol and oil are anticipated that will continually be the chief energy source.

It shows in the graphthat petrol and oil are anticipated that will continually be the chief energy source.

By 2014, both consumptions have climbed to the same number, at 25q, before that of coal will grew to 30q in 2030 and that of natural gas will level off.

In 2014, the consumption of both energy sources will reach 25q similarly, but in 2030 that of coal will ascend to 30q while that of natural gas will level off.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 28, 2014   #3
The line graph illustrates the consumption of various sources of energy inby the United State of AmericanAmerica from 1980 to 2030.

Overall, it can be seen that petrol and oil are anticipated that will continually be the chief energy source. The consumption of the other sources will increase, except for hydropower.

Good observations and a good Overview. The first sentence needs improvement in its presentation;
Overall, petrol and oil continue to be the chief energy source.
OP puman 6 / 13 1  
Mar 29, 2014   #4
It shows in the graph

That is a good change. Thanks.

Overall, petrol and oil continue to be the chief energy source.

Thanks. It looks more important than mine.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 30, 2014   #5
There is a prediction that petrol and oil have used almost 50 quadrillion unites (50q) from 35q in 1980

This has happened in the past and there for it is an historical data. Such things do not come under predictions. Predictions are for the things that would happen in the future.

Overall, you have followed a good structure and you have shown lots of improvement from your previous attempt on this task. That's the way to go :D

Do more practicing and we are here to help you :)


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