England and Wales - household and accommodation 1981-2001

households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of English and Welsh households with and without accommodation from 1981 to 2001.

Overall, it is noticed that households in temporary accommodation is significantly higher than households in owned accommodation on the first half of the period. However, on the second half of the timescale, owned accommodation replaced rented one to become preference of family in England and Wales.

With regard to households in rented accommodation, they accounted for around 75% in 1918, this proportion then dropped dramatically to 50% in 1971 before reaching the bottom of just over 30% in 2001. Despite the drop, it managed to slightly recover to 35% 10 years after 1971.

On the other hand, initially families living in owned house were minorities, at around 22% in 1918. This trend generally rose for the next 53 years with the year 1918 when with-accommodation households overtook households living in rented accommodation in percentage terms, at 60% and 40% respectively.

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While the information seems ok, it'd be helpful if you added the prompt? Then I'd be able to see what exactly you're supposed to do.

Sorry, i'm terrible to forgert it

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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