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IELTS Writing Task 2- not enough students study science subjects at university (Reasons/impacts)

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Sep 25, 2020   #1
Q. Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university.

What are the reasons for this? What impacts does this issue have on society?

Amidst an overwhelming array of hundreds of programs in university, it is noticeable that just a small proportion of students would like to pursue a science degree. This essay will highlight the contributing factors as well as the consequences of this trend posed to society in the coming future.

Not like a career-oriented degree, studying science is considered as an interest without a clear end goal. It is undeniable that many graduates with business or engineering-related degree are more capable of securing a job with a competitive salary and a better career development. Graduates from Science School, however, are often struggling to land a job upon graduation. For example, there is only a limited range of jobs with low starting salary for biology students such as research assistant and laboratory assistant. This may affect the willingness of students to choose a subject with a higher competitive edge. Secondly, lack of support to the industry is another reason behind. There is no denying the fact that not enough resources and money have been allocated from the government to the science field in order to support several researches. Consequently, this may trigger many talents to lose interest in joining or staying in the field.

The results of getting not enough scientists are tremendous, not only put our future generation in jeopardy, but also hinder the discovery of several scientific theories. The number of scientists may drop significantly and the new inventions fall correspondingly. It is worth mentioning that the swift development of society requires the assistant of technology, which highlight the importance of presence of scientists. Artificial Intelligence, for instance, is certainly essential to reduce the cost of operation in some social activities.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that limited resources distribution to science development and money-orientated society are the main causes of this phenomenon, which might lead to a negative result in the society.
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Sep 25, 2020   #2
Try not to write more than 290 words for the Task 2 essay. Focus on the clarity of each paragraph thought presentation. You do not need to over explain things in the paragraphs. 5 clear sentence explanations will work wonders for your final score. The stronger your topic sentence, the stronger your supporting sentence, the clearer your example, the better your supporting information, the higher your score in the end.

In your reasoning paragraphs, your first reason is clear enough, but your topic sentence for the second reason is incompletely developed. That caused you to under develop the rest of the second reasoning discussion as well. Then, you added a 3rd reason, without even trying to explain it. This paragraph is definitely problematic in presentation and lacking in proper thought development and discussion.

Your repercussions paragraph is just as problematic as your reasoning presentation. You need to really focus on shorter, clearer explanations. Do not just keep writing for the sake of creating a long essay. Even if you write long essays, if the sentences and paragraphs are not clearly threshed out, then your long essay will not help you pass the test.

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