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IELTS 7 WRITING TASK 2: ARE THE ENTERTAINERS PAID TOO MUCH?


anselzhang 4 / 4  
Feb 25, 2014   #1
Thanks for your comments :)

Topic :
 Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree?
  Which other types o f job should be highly paid?


My essay:

It is common to rouse a debate on whether celebrities deserve their payments whenever we talk about them. Some people think these entertainers are significantly overpaid when compared to people from other occupations. From my perspective, their massive influences and immense contributions have made the high salary acceptable.

First of all, the leading factors of these idols' success and earnings are indomitable mettle and painstaking practice. They have sacrificed their leisure time, personal relationship, even health, to achieve the ultimate goal while others may just entertain themselves. Usian Bolt, world's fastest sprint runner, had spent enormous time on his intensive training before he gained the worldwide recognition and became the highest paid athlete..

Furthermore, whether the stars are overpaid or not should depend not only on their incomings, but also on their outputs. They play a prominent role in cultural dissemination and public relaxation; moreover, they have made considerable profits for the entertainment companies. The music they created, the TV programs they produced and the movies they filmed are indispensable parts of our daily life.

Admittedly the salary level is unfair to the professions which are important to society. Policemen who risk their lives fighting criminals, doctors who fulfill their duties saving lives, may receive extremely little money. But it is the government's responsibility to regulate the opportunities, investments and attentions toward the less advantaged people.

Base on the above argument, I concede that entertainers are paid reasonably, regardless what the amount is. To preserve equality, harmony and stability in society, other professionals like professors, nurses and policemen deserve more attentions and money. Meanwhile, the stars should show their sympathy and benevolence through donations and charity activities.

mariasultana 7 / 13  
Feb 25, 2014   #2
Hi, you delivered your idea in good manners.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 26, 2014   #3
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