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'being enthusiastic and committed to become successful' - child hood dreams


neo1989 8 / 15  
Aug 15, 2012   #1
i hope some one take time and improve my article
becoming actor or pilot one day is popular dream among children and when i was child i had the same dreams. I always pictured my self flying F18 and dropping bombs and firing missiles. but now that i'm 23 years old i'm still have those dreams but it is too late. Now that i'm remorseful, i don't know to place blame on who and what. When i am thinking deeply i usually came to this conclusion that i should place part of the blame on fate that i was born in a country that it wasn't easy for me to become a pilot or actor and i place reminder of the blame on myself that i wasn't diligent and committed enough to make my dreams come true. But i think i still have time to become actor and because the passion i have for it i think i would become successful if i stay focused on my goals.

Many of us who have good appearance or talent can pursue careers like acting. Many people like leonardo dicaprio didn't follow in other people footstep and they didn't even attend university and now where they are, at least when they look at their life they will say to themselves that i have at least made one of my dreams come true.

I am not unhappy with the job i have and accomplishments that i have made but i came to the conclusion that life is short and we should not let life slit by.

Another man that should be an example to all of us is steve job, owner of apple company. I'm not sure what i am going to say is right or wrong about his personal life. His mother gave his custody to another family and they treat him like their own son. His new family was caring and kindhearted and saved enough money to help him enter stanford university and study biology. But after the first year he realized that he doesn't want to become biologist one day. So he quit university and began doing what he loved and because of being enthusiastic and committed he became successful.

in conclusion everyone of us believe deep down that we should pursue our dreams but because we are not brave enough to take risk we prefer to parrot other people.

Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Aug 15, 2012   #2
I still have those dreams, but it is too late... I was born in a country that it wasn't easymade it challenging for me to become a pilot or actor.and i place reminder of theI blame on myself thatbecause I wasn't diligent and committed enough to makefocus on my dreams.come true.. ...But i thinkI still have time to become an actor and because the passion i have for it i think i wouldto become successful if I stay focused on my goals.

I think that you are contradicting yourself here, first you say you can't do it, then you say you can... I think if you change the wording this may work for you, be descriptive.

Many of us who have good appearanceare attractive and talented can pursue careers like acting. Many people likeFor example,an actor like leonardo dicaprio didn't follow in other people"s footsteps.Heand they didn't even attend university,and now where they are, at least when they look at their life they will say to themselves that i have at least made one of my dreams come true.but he followed his passion for acting, which made him very successful.
OP neo1989 8 / 15  
Aug 15, 2012   #3
thanks a lot it seem that i had a lot of problem
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