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IELTS TASK 2 : Entrepreneur or worker? What are the benefits and the drawbacks of it?


ichatea07 27 / 24 10  
Jan 26, 2016   #1
SOME PEOPLE DECIDE TO START THEIR OWN BUSINESS INSTEAD OF WORKING FOR A COMPANY OR ORGANISATION. DO THE ADVANTAGES FOR PEOPLE WHO WORKING FOR THEIR OWN BUSINESS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

In today's world, economical needs has been people's priority to survive in life. Thus, most inhabitants compete with each other to find the best work for themselves. In other words, an occupation that can guarantee the amount of money they earn will be more than enough for them. relating to this, some decide to build a company or organisastion themselves rather than being employees of others' factories. To a certain degree, I argue that more positive impacts are attainable instead of exposing its drawbacks.

To start with, there are plenty of merits on committing to create a self-company which can improve someone's quality of life. First of all, starting a personal business in an area means providing more job vacancies to society. That way, the owner indirectly helps his homeland to reduce unemployment rates for a particular time. Differently, looking for a job to be an officer will only make people become dependent which will enlarge threat forces to come if a country witnesses an inflation. Secondly, a founder can train his creativity to design products which follow his passion. mainly, this will give him greater self-satisfaction when at the same time he can also determine his own earning to achieve higher profits. For instance, women who love clothes designing could establish their boutiques which enable them directly to do passion everyday. Meanwhile, a worker can only follow the instruction of a factory where he works. No fun action can be done in that condition, except their regular workloads. in another case, an illustration about money that entrepreneur gets can be seen in a CEO's income compared to his employees salaries for a month.

Apart from it, demerits in starting a business still exist. The most noticeable drawback is a new

NourNour 22 / 39 7  
Jan 26, 2016   #2
That IS way(or you can sayAS A RESULT )
the owner indirectly helps his homelandcommunity

when at the same time ...

Aside grammar mistakes, I think you should divide into two paragraph in each one you have you mention one reason and support it with an example if this possible. Besides, you conclusion is too short.
Febri91 5 / 6 2  
Jan 26, 2016   #3
Hi ichatea07, Let me correct your writing.

In today's world, economical needs hashave been people's priority to survive in life....

...., some decide to build a company or organisastionorganization themselves rather than being employees of others' factories....


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