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The environment improvement depends only on large companies since individuals can't do much alone


maulida07 6 / 7 1  
Aug 30, 2016   #1
Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and business can make a difference.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?


The improvement of environment only depends on large companies and business since the individuals have nothing to do about it. However, I am strongly against such notion because I believe that the individual participation is an important dimension of legislation to run and they have great roles in improving the environment.

It is argued that individual participation is increasingly viewed as important dimension of the environmental legislation. There is no legislation working without the participation of the individuals. We simply need their active contribution to make a certain legislation goes smoothly. For example, the government's program to separate wet and dry rubbish will only be succeeded if the individuals do it in a proper way. Their participation to throw rubbish separately in the right place is necessary in order to run such program.

Apart from previous discussion, the improvement of environment also relays on individual roles because they have a key position in controlling the environment. For example, the individuals need to reduce the use of private cars in order to create a better environment with fresh air and less pollution. Such action can only be done by the individuals.

To sum up, individual participation and role have great impacts on the improvement of environment. It will be much better if the individuals are given participatory rights in formulating environmental policy.

Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
Hello

Some of the sentences/words in your text could be improved. The applied adjustments are as follows:

improvement [...] protection...
since theordinary individuals [...] can do very little about it.
such notionassumption...
dimension of legislationthe movement to save the natural environment.
There is no legislation [...] No legislation could work without the active participation of ordinary citizens.
to make sure that a certain...
will only be succeededprove sucsessful if...
the improvementpreservation of the natural environment [...] can only be achieved if people are willing to contribute to it on a daily basis.
Other than that, the rest of your text seems Ok. I hope this helped. Regards.
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 30, 2016   #3
Hi maulida,

- However, I am strongly against such notion because I believethat the individual participation ...
- ... participation is increasingly viewed asan important dimension of ...
- There is no legislation working without ...
- the improvement ofimproving environment also ...
- the individuals need to reduce the use ofusing private cars in order ...

Hopefully it helps. Keep Writing.
ashelarisa48 36 / 52 4  
Aug 30, 2016   #4
Hello Maulida! Nice to see you in essay forum! Here a little feedback for you.

The improvement of environment An environment preservation can only rely depends on the large companies and the business since (...) nothing to do about it.

... and dry rubbish will only be succeeded successful if the individuals do ...

Apart from previous discussion, the improvement of environment also relays on individual roles because they have a key position in controlling the environment. ( you write some words repeated several times, it will be better if you look for the similar words)

To sum up, individual participation and role have great impacts on the ... ----> use one of them, participation or role, if you use both of them, it is redundancy)

keep writing and good luck


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