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Writing Task 1: Erosion of a headland - effects of waves in the coastal area

agus_mono 13 / 23 2  
Mar 28, 2017   #1
The diagram below show the stages in the erosion of a headland. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Headland Erosion

The pictures illustrate how a headland can be eroded by wave in the coastal area and how the surface of hard rock can be changed. Overall, it is interesting to notice that even though the wave is quiet enough, it effects on the surface of a headland, and wear the headland down naturally without human activity.

Firstly, the first process is destruction of particular part of headland, especially in weak area will be eroded because of wave strength and then the small cave will be created. The small cave is bigger and bigger in size, so that it becomes natural arch. It likes Durdle, Door, and Dorset.

The further process, sea water hits the arch roof regularly. As the consequence, the roof stack falls into the sea level and the headland is separated and becomes small headland called stack. Afterward, the sea water still erodes the stuck and it is smaller and smaller. As a result, the small part of the stack exist opposite it, called stump.

Whatsminmin 2 / 6 1  
Mar 28, 2017   #2
I think its good to describe every picture to show the comparison between them, and pick out every differences that every picture does not have
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Mar 28, 2017   #3
Agus, the essay can probably get a 5 because you managed to present the obvious information in the illustration you were provided. While you would get a good score for this essay, that does not erase the fact that you did not manage to present the explanation of the erosion process in the proper manner. If you review the drawing, you will notice that each picture has a complete series of erosion procedures that combine to create the overall erosion. Each erosion procedure is equivalent to a single paragraph in the essay, had you explained each of the pictures in a complete paragraph manner. Bonus points for knowing how to use the examples given. However, the example is Durdle Door and Dorset. There is no comma between Durdle and Door, it is one word. The essay was already partially written for you in this instance, all you had to do was properly expand upon the provided information. With that said, you should know that there is still plenty of room for you to learn how to fully utilize the illustrations you are given to summarize. Just keep practicing. You have the potential to do it perfectly in the future.

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