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An Eruption at Rinjani in Indonesia Traps Hundreds of Tourists (Article Summary)


fauzankrn 16 / 23 3  
Oct 3, 2016   #1
Barujari mount which is located in inside caldera of Rinjani, has revealed to the public by most volatile volcano. It has breathtaking caldera and volcano views, but also has high risk of being trapped, injured even killed by volcano erupts. Yesterday, 130-390 people were trapped caused by moderate explosive eruption. Recently, the PVMBG (Pusat Vulkanologi dan Mitigasi Bencana Geologi) has released the limitation to keep away from a radius of 3 kilometers due to increased eruptive activity and raised alert to level II while local authorities still evacuate and rescue remains tourist who trapped in the site.
Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Oct 3, 2016   #2
Hello
You've done well. However, there are inputs for you.

Barujari mount which is located in inside caldera of Rinjani >> Barujari mountain located inside caldera of Rinjani maountain

revealed to the public by most volatile volcano. >> it is renowned by its volatile volcano

..., but also has high risk of being trapped, injured ... >> but also has challenging track such as being trapped, injured even killed caused by volcano views.

Yesterday , 130-390 people were trapped caused ... >> (don't use "yesterday" I think, you have to clearly decide when it was happen precisely)

released the limitation to keep away from a radius of ... >> release a set of restriction to keep away from a radius 3 kilometer to avoid increasing of

keep writing....


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