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IELTS Task 1. Estimated world illiteracy


bakhadeer 6 / 20  
Apr 10, 2014   #1
IELTS Graph #18

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
You should write at least 150 words.

Answer:
The bar chart provides information about estimated observation in world illiteracy rates by six different regions as well as by gender for the year 2000.

Overall, the proportions showed higher percentage than previous one, started from developed countries. The most outstanding rate of illiteracy was in South Africa and belonged to females at approximately 53 percent. There were almost identical levels of trends for men in three regions, included Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, about 30 percent.

The figures for women, in three regions mentioned above were comparable to male results, and were between 48 and 66 percent.
East Asia and Oceania showed a moderate figure for females at 20%, while males rate was standing at 8 percent. There were similar outcome for both male and female in Latin America and Caribbean, 10(should I write in letters???) and 12 percent, respectively. The greatest percentage of literacy was in developed countries and at only in two percent female with one percent male verified lack of education (or knowledge)

In general (or In fact) female genders dominated in rate of illiteracy, by all given regions.

Check it please, and I will wait for your comments))




fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 10, 2014   #2
Overall, the proportions showed higher percentage than previous one, started from developed countries. The most outstanding rate of illiteracy was in South Africa and belonged to females at approximately 53 percent. There were almost identical levels of trends for men in three regions, included Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, about 30 percent.

when you want to add 'overview' I suggest you to write just a one sentence or two because it just contains the overview or general view,,do not write the details here
OP bakhadeer 6 / 20  
Apr 10, 2014   #3
you know i've just one sentence written to overview. but i have some problems in sentence order. however thanks for feedback))
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 10, 2014   #4
The bar chart provides information about estimated observation in world illiteracy rates byin six different regions as well as bybased on gender for the year 2000.

Overall, the proportions showed higher percentage than previous one, started from developed countries.

.... what do you mean by "than previous one"? What do you refer to ?

Overall, the proportions showed higher percentage than previous one, started from developed countries. The most outstanding rate of illiteracy was in South Africa and belonged to females at approximately 53 percent. There were almost identical levels of trends for men in three regions, included Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, about 30 percent.

This is not a proper overview. Overview should not be a detailed para (which you need to do in the next couple of paras). In the overview, you need to tell the reader about most obvious trends without much details.
OP bakhadeer 6 / 20  
Apr 11, 2014   #5
[quote=Pahan]previous one"? What do you refer to ?

i wanted to describe that latter had higher results than first, in order first is developed countries...
xingshigang 4 / 9  
Apr 11, 2014   #6
This is benificial for me as well
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 11, 2014   #7
Overall, the proportions showed higher percentage than previous one, started from developed countries

i wanted to describe that latter had higher results than first, in order first is developed countries...

Ok, then this is how you should present it;
Overall, the Asian regions are expected to perform higher literacy rates in contrast to the the developed countries and Latin American/ Caribbean regions.
For the overview, you can include this most obvious trend too;
The female literacy levels are estimated to surpass the male literacy levels by the year 2000
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 11, 2014   #8
In general (or In fact) female genders dominated in rate of illiteracy, by all given regions.

This should have come after the intro as the OVERVIEW , which describes the general trends of the graphical presentation very briefly, without much details.
OP bakhadeer 6 / 20  
Apr 11, 2014   #9
hi pahan, as you said my conclusion is more suitable for overview, isnt it?

and can you give some instructions to summarize pie charts?

thanks dumi, i will follow to your suggestions


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