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Europe is the pioneer in underground railways system. Comparison.


Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
IELTS SUMMARY 6 Major Subways of Europe

Europe is the pioneer in underground railways system as public transportation and London was built the first subway in the world which opened in 1863. At this time, train still used steam engine and the smoke must be released through the vent in the surface. Otherwise, in 1825 London was build pedestrian tunnel under the Thames River which is the first underwater tunnel in the world.

Paris also built a subway to compete London and opened when Olympic held in Paris in 1900. Paris metro is known for its beauty which decorated with mosaic, sculptures, paintings, and innovative doors and walls. After that Moscow built underground railway in 1935 which filled with artworks like statuary, painting, and mosaic.

Except for transportation, underground railways have many advantages. For example, subway was used as bomb shelters when World War II, and Moscow subways also was used as military headquarters.

Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
Hello Yonathan
i has a advice in your essay, pay attention if you wish

in 1825 London was build pedestrian tunnel under the Thames River which is the first underwater ...
in one sentence but you used two times (past and present)
gdesastr 2 / 2  
Sep 19, 2016   #3
Hallo Yonathan, I have suggestions for your essay, perhaps you can increase your skill with it:

here we go

your essay :
... and Moscow subways also waswere used as military headquarters.

you should use were if you say more than one object.

I hope you keep trying and learn more and more about grammar.


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