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IELTS: 'everal reasons rates as adults' decision to study' - A REPORT FOR A UNIVERSITY LECTURER.


aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 15, 2014   #1
The bar chart and pie chart show details about several reasons rates as adults' decision to study and the costs which should be shared by three factors in each course, Taxpayer, Individual, and Employer.

The first, the horizontal chart shows three pieces of reasons according to adults' decision. Starting from the highest is spotted on 'Interest in subject' purpose at 40% and followed by ' To gain qualifications' as the second highest less 2% than the highest rates. In average rates, there are three reasons which have similarity percentages on 'Helpful for current jobs, To improve prospects of promotion, and Enjoy learning' at 22, 20, and 20 per cent respectively. As the third pieces and as the lower reasons percentages 'To able to change jobs' gets 12 %, and 'To meet people' only obtains 9% as the lowest of reasons by adults argument.

The second of the pie chart, Individual occupies the highest rates of the course costs at 40 per cent. Employer gets 35 per cent, and Taxpayer at 25 per cent as the lowest paying of each course.

Overall, adults' majority decision is 'Interest in subject' pertaining on education determined , and the largest costs of course shared at 'Individual' payment.




Pahan 1 / 1,966 553  
Apr 15, 2014   #2
The bar chart and pie charts show details about severalthe reasons rates aswhy adults' decisiondecide to study and how the costs which should beof courses were shared by three factors in each course, Taxpayer, Individuals , and Employers .

This is what I suggest for your intro;
The bar chart illustrates the statistics of the reasons why adults decide to study and the pie chart presents how the cost of each course is shared by the taxpayer, individual and employer.
OP aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 15, 2014   #3
Huge Thanks Pahan, I like the way you make simply intro :D

umm, could you notice my writing presentation errors in each charts?
Pahan 1 / 1,966 553  
Apr 15, 2014   #4
More than everything else, I think you need to adopt a more appropriate structure for this task.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,225 457  
Apr 16, 2014   #5
22, 20, and 20 per cent respectively

Avoid writing such lists, showing immature writing. You need more work for this.
A few notes from the bodies:
Grouping data together where there are patterns is a vital key to have a succinct explanation of body paragraphs .
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,225 457  
Apr 17, 2014   #6
The first, the horizontal chart...

This is good, but shows complexity.

Let me give a try:
A subject's preference breaks a record as the highest percentage. Gaining qualification, this shows 22 percent of participants. However, there seems a slight gap between the opportunity for changing the job and meeting people, with twelve and 9 percent of participants.


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