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TOEFL: excellent knowledge is better than ability to adopt oneself.


nickyzhi 8 / 21 8  
Sep 20, 2014   #1
detailed prompt:
Do you agree or disagree with the statement, in order to succed in doing a new job, the ability to adapt oneself in a new environment is more important than excellent knowledge of this job.

I write it in limited time, so there is no time for me to rewrite it by better sentence, but still need your suggestion of this essay. Thanks in advance :-)

With the rapid development of economy, the controversial of good worker's requirement is always in a limelight. A large number of people will say the ability to adapt oneself to a new environment is necessary, because it is the basic communication skill for a new worker. From my perspective, there is only one thing would be beneficial to company, and there is only one way to be an outstanding worker, that is possessing excellent knowledge of this job. That's why I believe that the excellent knowledge of this job will be more significant.

Admittedly, the ability to adapt oneself to the new environment has been proven to be part of job. This ability is helpful in communicating with other workmates, cooperating with other workers needs this ability, too. But working alone is a longer-term job than communicating, that is, the ability of adapting oneself to a new environment may be necessary for a fresh worker, but the excellent knowledge of this job will be benefit till one leave.

The company will benefit from every worker of excellent knowledge. The core and most profitable technology of an IT company is invented by a worker with excellent computer knowledge, not a worker with outstanding communicating skill. The high reputation and popularity of a company is earned by some brilliant workers in public relation department with excellent skill to propagate this company. So the company will earn more money and reputation from these workers with excellent knowledge.

Employees will obtain reward from hard-work pursuing excellent knowledge. Through our whole study life, undergraduate and graduate, we keep learning with the purpose of exerting these knowledge and experience on our job, just like an old Chinese scholar said, the essence of study is utilizing it. After we get a job, the destination of we keep accumulating and collecting knowledge is rooted not in fawn on our manager with the ability to adapt this kind of business culture, but in making us excellent and totally master this job. Finally, we will be rewarded with pride. That's why we can obtain reward from out excellent knowledge.

To sum up, I would have to say that although we can use the ability of adapting oneself in a new environment, the excellent knowledge will be of more importance. Because it can not only benefit our employers, but also ourselves will be rewarded.

Consular 1 / 9 1  
Sep 20, 2014   #2
The organization of the essay is good but to make it clear I think that arguments should be longer I mean you need more analysis to touch the goal of the essay.
Adamtong 9 / 32 2  
Sep 25, 2014   #3
I notice that the supervision from a professional guy is fewer recently.
good luck for your test.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: student should take at least one year to work or travel before they go to university.小马机经预测的作文题哦!

good luck for the exam!
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Oct 1, 2014   #4
Well, the structure of your essay is quite interesting . However, try to paraphrase ,,excellent knowledge'';D and do not forget about examples by depicting it.


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