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With the exception in 2009, The US had the highest sale number of hybrid transportation


putri22 33 / 33 5  
Feb 1, 2016   #1
The bar chart compares the number of sales of hybrid transport in Japan, US and other countries from 2006 to 2009. Overall, it can obviously be seen that with the exception in 2009, The US had the highest number of hybrid transportation sales rather than other countries.

According to the data, in the first two years, the hybrid vehicles were sold approximately 250,000 in the US while those in Japan and other countries sold only around 50,000. Again, the US reached the highest number of sales in 2007 in which there was a dramatic increase to 350,000 meanwhile Japan and other countries saw a slight growth to about 52,000 and 53,000 respectively.

Turning to the last two years, in 2008, even though there was a drop in the US, it still had the highest number of hybrid vehicle sales. On the other hand, nearly 100,000 hybrid transports were sold respectively in Japan and other countries. Interestingly, Japan witnessed a significant rise in the number of sales from about 100,000 to 325,000 in the last year, which was the highest number in that year. In other countries, the number of hybrid vehicle sales saw a slight growth above 100,000, the lowest number in that year.



vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Feb 1, 2016   #2
Try to build a bit more on your vocabulary. Widen your word choices. Since this is a practice test, you can still use a synonym reference book or online source to help you vary and teach you about identical word usage. Don't miss out on the opportunity to learn how to increase your knowledge of the English language.

... sales of hybrid transport CARS in Japan, US and other ... with the exception in OF 2009, The US had the highest number of hybrid transportation AUTOMOTIVE sales rather than WHEN COMPARED TO other countries.

... the hybrid vehicles were sold WERE approximately 250,000 ...sold only around 50,000.... sales in 2007 in which there was a WITH A dramatic increase to 350,000. m Meanwhile Japan ...

... there was a drop in the US SALES ... 100,000 hybrid transports CARS were sold respectively in Japan and other countries. ... in DURING the last year... above 100,000, the lowest number in FOR that year.
ichatea07 27 / 24 10  
Feb 1, 2016   #3
Overall, it can obviously be seen that ...

This general statement can be enlarged more to explain total changes and what was generally happening in other countries.

The highest could be substituted with other superlative words, such as the greatest, the most preferred, the most popular, and so on.

o 325,000 in the last year, END OF THE PERIOD.

Besides, remember to carefully select words regarding to its collocation, like when you may tell as a growth of a trend.
aflah15 32 / 18 4  
Feb 1, 2016   #4
Overall, it can obviously be seen that with the exception in OF 2009,
which was the highest number in that year THIS PERIOD.

Try to paraphrase 'vehicle' since it would be better for improving the quality of your essay. You can try to find the synonym in various dictionaries.


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