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Expenditure, Inhabitant and Consumption of Resources in the world


Bunglon11 28 / 31 5  
Jan 19, 2016   #1
The pie charts below show World Spending, World population and Consumption of Resources.

A breakdown of Expenditure, Inhabitant, and Consumption of Resources in the world which are measured in the percentage, are illustrated by the pie charts. At first glance, that is obvious that there are different percentage of expenditures by people in the world. Consumption of resources is dominated by USA and some countries in Europe. A significant difference is shown in the number of population among some continents.

Moving to population in the world, the significant percentage of population in the world is extremely dominated by Asia, at nearly three-fifths. In spite of that, Africa shows the reverse at one in ten. On the other hand, Europe and Americas present the similar pattern of population, at 14 percent followed by others that stand at a very small number.

Turning to the expenditures in the world, the expenditure for food holds the highest percentage in the world spending at practically quarter which is followed by transport as the second that shows 18 percent and housing spending is twice as less than food expenditure. By contrast, clothing spending stands at the least proportion that explains solely 6% and 40 percent for other spending. Interestingly, the highest proportion of resources consumption are dominated by USA and Europe that show at 60 percent than others which are solely two-fifths.




pikul 23 / 26 3  
Jan 19, 2016   #2
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vangiespen - / 4,140 1449  
Jan 19, 2016   #3
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... among some continents.
- The chart specifically mentions the names of the continents so you have to mention the same in order to deliver reliable information to the reader.

Moving to population in the world POPULATION... world WAS extremely ...Africa shows the reverse OPPOSITE ... Europe and Americas present the A similar pattern of ...

that stand at a very small number.
- The chart indicates a figure so use the figure provided. That is part of developing an informative and factual report.

... in the world spending at ... which is was followed ... By IN contrast... least proportion that explains solely OF 6% ... resources consumption are WAS dominated by THE USA and Europe that show at SHOWING 60 percent than...

Since these figures have already been previously collected, the report should be written in past tense.
faarasyad 7 / 15 7  
Jan 19, 2016   #4
Hi Bunglon11,

here is my correction

A breakdown of Expenditure, Inhabitant, and Consumption of Resources ...

A breakdown of Expenditure, Inhabitant Rates, and Consumption of Resources in the world which are measured in the percentage, is illustrated in the pie charts. At first glance, that is obvious that there are five categorizations of expenditure's figure. While the consumption of resources is dominated by USA and some countries in Europe, a significant difference is shown in the number of population among some continents.

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