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The expenditure on Photographic is the highest amongst all other consumer goods of Britain


Jack Jiang 1 / -  
Aug 11, 2016   #1
IELTS-The expenditure on six consumer goods in four European countries

The chart shows the differences of the expenditure on six consumer goods by the people of four European countries, namely Britain, France, Italy and Germany.

Overall, people in Britain spend more money on all six consumer goods than that of the other countries. Specifically, the expenditure on Photographic is the highest amongst all other consumer goods of Britain, as well as amongst the other countries.

In contrast, Germany is generally the lowest spender. This is more evident on Photographic film, which Germany spend 146 thousand pounds sterling, much less than that of Britain, which is more than 170 thousand pounds sterling.

Meanwhile, Italy and Germany maintain the middle positions. The expenditure on Photographic film and Toys of France is greater than that of Italy. But for Perfumes, Tennis racquets and Personally stereos, people in France spend less than Italy people. Sepcifically, the spending on Toys is equal between the two countries.




ramzi06 9 / 17 4  
Aug 11, 2016   #2
Greetings Mr Jack Jiang,
Just sharing several information regarding to your writing.

The chart shows the differences of the expenditure on ...
It sounds more academic if you change like this :
The chart shows/informs/illustrates the comparison of six consumer goods expenditure among four European countries, Britain, France, Italy and Germany.

Overall, people in Britain spend ... Specifically, the expenditure on Photographic is the highest amongst among all other consumer goods of Britain...

Overall, British citizens/citizens in Britain dominated all consumer products. Although Italian people consistently expend equal or over 150 thousand pound sterling, Germany experience the reverse.

That's All
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