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Experience is the best teacher or reading books is more important?

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Feb 10, 2019   #1

knowledge from an experience or from books?

It has always been a great debate whether the reading or experience is better for the living. books and experience are the main two channels for People to gain their knowledge.

Some people believe that reading is better than experience since it improves people's creativity and imagination, and their literature skill as well. To a certain extent, I would agree with the statement, but I stick to the idea that experience is more important.

As you know we have a lot of book in many domains that without any experience cannot be written. I'm of the view that the most important lessons cannot be taught. It must be faced and learned all by ourselves. In this part, I would explain it.

First of all, experience has numerous advantages for mankind that I would discuss in this part. Experience gives us first-hand knowledge about everything. We give a lot of experience when we are an infant to die. A child saw how crying result in eating something. So with the experience, he is learning how to be live. never I forgot how I faced by a real situation in my first class as a teacher, I think we can't be a good teacher without experiencing that in class, although we receive a lot of information from reading books is not enough. Every situation has own specific characteristic that it is different from others. Also, there are a lot of new inventions and new products which could not be found in textbooks. In other words, society can't be progress unless using innovation and ability of experts that is not in textbooks.

On the other hand, we need the resource for leading people in a particular way for life. Book act as a guideline for someone who can't experience it ever. Traveling with a book is enjoyable for anyone. You easily give your mind to the writer. But as books have a limitation, they only teach us what people found in the past. It didn't speak about now. For example, in university, we have passed near 12 courses in public policy in a different setting that it was just theoretical viewpoint until we went to society and faced with a different organization that any of them has own rules and policies about health.

In conclusion, I should say that knowledge from experience helps us much more than those from books.

Holt - / 7,529 2001  
Feb 11, 2019   #2
Parisaa, without knowing if this is an IELTS practice test and without the discussion instructions for this essay, I cannot review this essay on the scoring basis of the test or discussion instructions. My advice will be limited to grammar mistakes because of the missing review instructions. Please remember to provide the discussion instructions the next time to receive a comprehensive review from me.

When using an introductory element such as "So", meaning you are starting the sentence with that word, you need to use a comma to create a pause in the reading before continuing to write the discussion. The punctuation mark will allow the reader to pause and prepare for the next part of the discussion.

You must also never use contractions when writing an academic essay. I am assuming that you are writing an academic essay since you are asking for writing feedback. Contractions in your essay include can't (cannot) , didn't (did not), I'm (I am).

These mistakes seem simple and unimportant when viewed by the writer of the essay. However, an examiner will have to consider these mistakes as a part of the scoring criteria, which means these mistakes could pull your score down per criteria. Assuming that you are taking a some sort of English proficiency test that is.
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Feb 11, 2019   #3
Hi Holt
Thanks for your kindly message
I wrote this as an IELTS essay practice, I know it has a lot of problems. Do you mean that conclusion is less than normal?

How i can improve this essay? please give me your comments.

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