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TOEFL-Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable


stellastella 18 / 25  
Jan 4, 2012   #1

Valuable Lessons from Experience



Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I completely agree with the idea that experiences in our live that seemed difficult at the present time become valuable lessons for the future. It is my opinion that, all stuffs which individuals try and experience during their life give a benefit to them in the future. It makes no difference these experiences might be sweet or bitter.

In the first place, I have always believed that when people experience a new thing by themselves the advantages and disadvantages of that experience record in their mind forever. So it is better and more valuable than using the other experiences.

Moreover, there are somethings which are not only stiff to learn from others but also hard to teach to others. Such as teaching a child to avoid playing with a sharp object. They do not understand our meaning unless at least for once they feel and experience the pain of that sharp object.

All in all, nowadays one of the best ways to learn new materials are experience. As much as, some experiences might be bitter, in the future they become definitely sweet and valuable lessons. With the help of experience we learn what job are good and should be repeated in future and what job we should avoid repeating them.

soshianet 16 / 47  
Jan 4, 2012   #2
your essay is so small and you have written out of standard of Toefl samples. Please see some samples.
OP stellastella 18 / 25  
Jan 4, 2012   #3
I ask others to correct my grammar mistakes.
If you cannot correct others' essay please do not put irrelevant comment on them.
soshianet 16 / 47  
Jan 5, 2012   #4
Here, you put your essay to be improve and an unsuitable essay is not a perfect job.

I completely agree with the idea that experiences in our live that seemed difficult at the present time become valuable lessons for the future. (you have copied, and you may lose perfect score.)

There are some things
we learn what job jobs are good and should be repeated in future and what job, we
what jobs we should avoid repeating them.

Moreover, you did not support your idea effectively.
hoanghai549 5 / 13  
Jan 5, 2012   #5
Your opinion is too short , write again .


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