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In 2015 export of dairy products had dominated comparing to other products


Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
The table chart shows number of Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 and compares with prediction in 2025. Overall, it is immediately apparent that in 2015 export of dairy products had dominated than other products. While in future predition, international tourism will be the highest percentage.

There are number of main exports of Someland which devided into two earner: product, meat and dairy; international tourism. In 2005 meat product decreased gradually from around 6 USD to 3 one-fifth in the future. On the another product, dairy product had fluctuated from 2005, 4 one-fifth USD; 2015, increasengly to point 8 USD and the prediction decreased steadly into approximately 7,8 USD.

From human service side, international had been main exports of Someland. It rose gradually, stood at about 6,2 in 2005 up to approximately 7 USD in 2015. In the prediction, the best rise of international tourism wiil be happened in 2025 at around 8 USD.




fauziyahtami 22 / 38 6  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Halo, you have done great
I will try to give some advice

... exports of Someland which devided (typing error divided ) into two earner (plural you should have to add (s )): product, meat and dairy; international tourism.
In 2005 meat product (you could added 's' if it's for more than one product) decreased gradually from ...
On the another product (s ), dairy product had fluctuated (...); 2015, increasengly (typo increasingly ) to point 8 USD and the prediction decreased steadly (typo steadily or steady ) into approximately 7,8 USD.

It rose gradually, stood at about (...) rise of international tourism wiil be happened (happening --> using future continous) in 2025 at around 8 USD (you can directly say "around 8 USD")

Thank you :)


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