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'expressing myself in deferent's ways' - My passion for singing


Crysta 1 / 1  
Sep 3, 2012   #1
well this is a common 5 paragraphs sentence is this how it should be?
My passion for singing
Admittedly I got to say, As the sun rises thru my window and lights up my colorful room I wake up, part my lips and start to sing little melodies that make my day go bright( that let me fly on my house). Music has become a part of my life since I was born. it makes me express my feelings and emotions. And for me it's how I communicate with the world and the people I love. For me music is art it's like you're making a piece of art just like Picasso but with words rhymes and notes, flying and passing with the air. My passion for signing is from deep down inside my soul, mind and heart. Every time I sing I put the best I can do and that is how it makes me fall in love more with this passion.

I always had a intense passion for singing since I could speak my first words. When I was 5 years old I use to sing every time I could, in the shower, the school, the living room. When I was 6 years old I always had problems falling asleep cuss every time it was bed time I was singing in my bed looking my fingers and putting the like I was playing piano. when my family gifted me a CD, I memorizes it in almost 2 days I was singing the whole CD, I remember a CD I had about a girl name "Amy" and oh how I loved that CS singing in every spot in my house running up and down with the music playing a side.

After two weeks I had to hide to sing cuss my mom got tired of hearing me sing the same thing. Under my bed, outside, behind the sofas only so she won't say anything cuss I was singing, but I told myself I won't give up cuss that was my dream and my passion and I would not stop singing because of anyone.

Every day passed and my passion got bigger and bigger and I got better and better at singing and so as the years pass and I still remained that passion of mine

Since I discover a lot of types of music I had better ways to express how I really felled.
When I had the needed to cry because a love fail I just go, grab my IPod, go on a lonely place and started to sing my most favorites songs ever. Some of them where rock others (Ricardo Montaner, David Bisbal, Ricardo Arjona, Christian Castro) and many more, I imagine singing with them like a concert full of colorful music notes like pink, blue, green, yellow flying truth my view, suddenly I feel a lot better with myself. And when get so excited with something that I feel so happy about it I only sing along with the birds and the wind and get so happy cuss I'm doing my passion.

However for me has been really bad communicating with other people cuss I'm kind of shy and when I get to talk to a stranger I get red and nervous say things that don't make even since and music has been a way to communicate better with what I need to say. When I meet a person and I don't have any idea of what to say I simply talk about music and I start to sing and

Singing had helped me give messages to many people about to have conciences in to take care to the world and to be peace full with others.

I always love to make circles with friends and sing along and, let out voice be the word want to have
Thanks to my singing I can make others learn to enjoy life by singing. By singing I can show that drugs are bad and that if u sign u can communicate better

I simply teach stranger to communicate how I communicate to them.
The best way for me to communicate with others is singing that way they can understand me better

After all, For me singing is the only way to express myself in deferent's ways. It can leave me to magical places and can make me imagine the music notes in 3D colorful things that I would had never see if I didn't sing. My passion for singing it will always be inside my heart soul and mind. I love singing more than anything in the world and I'm going to keep singing and putting the best I can do every time I try it so I can fall in love more with my passion.
LillyCullenT 2 / 16  
Sep 3, 2012   #2
("deferent's ways") Seriously? Please revise your essay, it contains coutless spelling and grammatical mistakes.

I'll be happy to help afterwards :) ~Lilly Cullen
OP Crysta 1 / 1  
Sep 3, 2012   #3
if u can help me please i will be very great full its my first one


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