over the past few years life for me and my family has changed . there has been a lot of people settling in our area (What do you mean? You should link the changes to the increase in the population) . I think this change is for the betterment because I have (do not use contractions) met so many new friends (What is the relationship between the change and new friends? It is too vague) .
A lotMost of them have told me that there are bigger townscities out there , where I once thought was just more farm land (Revise the sentence. It is hard to understand) . My father says that the demand of the towns are the reason why our farming has changed so much (Is farming changed positively or negatively? What types of changes? Is that a technological change? Add more details.) .
I think you should start the essay with an statement about the industrial revolution because u did not mention what kind of change has occurred. If I were you, I would open my essay with an interesting event or story, which shows how industrial revolution changed my life.