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The extinction of the elephant population becomes a crucial aspect to discuss, it brings attention


ibal28 20 / 30 5  
Sep 17, 2016   #1
Summary Article: A Legal Trade in Ivory Would Wipe Out Elephants, Study Finds

Nowadays, the extinction of the elephant population becomes a crucial aspect to discuss and being the world attention. This has happened due to a legal hunt by the black hunter and sale in the black market as well. If poaching is legalised, it means some people would easier to buy the ivory, but that is not comparable with necessary that only 37 percent. According to the Landmark Survey, elephant population is in danger now, that some 27,000 are killed by poachers every year.

In one hand, some people who agree with the legal poaching argue that the amount of ivory can be reduced in the future because it was determined and it becomes an increase in the future. However, on the other hand, they say that it has no impact at all because it could not change the elephant extinction. Although a few countries such as Africa, Namibia and Zimbabwe that concur to this issue, it could not change the result of the legal hunt. This case strong supported by some evidence regarding the legal hunts each year that can cause a difficult problem to handle.
andika08 81 / 80 16  
Sep 17, 2016   #2
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections

... it means some people would be easier to buy ...
However, on the other hand, they say said that it hashad no impact at all because it could not change the elephant extinction.
... that concur to this issue, it could not change the result of the legal hunt.

Maybe you can using the other conjuction.
There are repeated words.


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