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Extinctions plant and animals and the cause of endangered plant life


anggicaroot 20 / 19 3  
Nov 23, 2015   #1
A comparison of endangered of plant and animal species in tropical forest from 2000 to 2100, a 100-year period is presented in line charts. The pie chart reveals the cause of plant life extinct. Overall, the number of plant and animal is forecast more safety than in 40 years before. In any case, while there are several factors in the rates of extinctions plant and animal, the most considerable cause is human impact.

In the beginning of period, the number of plant and animal extinct stood at approximately 4000 species. Over following forty-year period, it is predicted a gradual rise to 20,000. While the figure for endangered plant and animal will peak in 2060 at 50 million species, from 2080 to 2100 is forecast a sharp decline under 30,000 million species

However, when you look at the negative causes to plant life with the greatest proportion of threatened species is human impact over three-quarters of rates. In contrast natural events have the lowest percentage of extinction at 18.7%. Agriculture and harvesting are also harmful to plant. On the other hand, the danger because of human is on a much smaller scale in plantations, with figures ranging at 4.7%. Natural event threats such us natural disaster reveals at 7%, as the same rates of livestock.




lrodri26 1 / 8 1  
Nov 23, 2015   #2
Hi @anggicaroot, I tried editing some grammar issues I found. Hope it helps.

A comparison of endangered plant and animal species in tropical rainforests from 2000 to 2100 is presented in the line chart below. The pie chart reveals the cause of plant life extinction. Overall, the number of plants and animals is forecasted more safety than in 40 years before (not sure what you mean here). In any case, while there are several factors in the extinction rates of plants and animals, the most considerable cause is human impact.

In the beginning, the number of plant and animal extinction stood at approximately 4000 species. Over the following forty-year period, it is predicted to gradually rise to 20,000 species. While the figure for endangered plants and animals will peak in the year 2060 at 50 million species, from 2080 to 2100 is forecasted to sharply decline under 30,000 million species.

However, when you look at the negative causes to plant life, the greatest proportion of threatened species is contributed by human destruction over 75%. In contrast, natural events have the lowest percentage of extinction at 18.7%. Agriculture and harvesting are also harmful to plants. On the other hand, the danger of human impact is a much smaller scale in plantations, with figures ranging at 4.7%. Natural event threats such us natural disaster reveals at 7%, as the same rates as livestock.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 24, 2015   #3
Hi Caroot, let me offer you another version of your essay by correcting some points ok? This is how I think you can present this essay better.

A comparison of endangered of plant and animal species in A tropical forest COVERING A 100 YEAR PERIOD from 2000 to 2100, a 100-year period is presented in line charts. The pie chart reveals the cause of plant life extinct EXTINCTION. Overall, the number of plantS and animalS is ARE forecast more safety TO BE SAFER TODAY RATHER than in 40 years before. In any case, while there are several factors in the rates of extinctions plant and animal PLANT AND ANIMAL EXTINCTIONS, the most considerable cause is APPEARS TO BE RELATED TO human impact ON THE ENVIRONMENT.

In AT the beginning of THE period, the number of EXTINCT plantS and animalS extinct stood at approximately 4000 species. Over THE following forty-year period, it is predicted a gradual rise THERE IS A PREDICTION THAT THESE WILL GRADUALLY RISE to 20,000. While the figure for endangered plantS and animalS will peak in 2060 at 50 million species, from 2080 to 2100 is A forecast HAS BEEN MADE INDICATING a sharp decline TO under 30,000 million species

However, when you look at the negative causes to plant life with the greatest proportion of threatened species is THE human impact COVERS over three-quarters of rates. In contrast, natural events have the lowest percentage of extinction at 18.7%. Agriculture and harvesting are also harmful to plantS. On the other hand, the danger because CAUSED BY of humanS ARE is on a much smaller scale in plantations, with figures ranging at 4.7%. Natural event threats such us natural disasterS reveals IS SEEN at 7%, as the same AS THE rates of livestock.


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