It is agreed thatthereThere are several kinds of communication helping people communicate without contacting directly, such as letters, e-mail, or telephone calls.
.... whether you agree or not , those things are there. So, the first section sounds irrelevant. Do not include phrases that cannot add much value to your writing. That may make the examiner tired of reading your essay and you would lose marks.
However, some people objected that these kinds of communication are not ablefail to express talkers' ideas and emotions as well as face to face communication.
.... keep in present tense as it keeps happening.
However, some people find these modern methods of communication as a hindrance to sound human relationships because these methods fail to accommodate feelings and emotions that directly and more freely expressed in face to face communication.Opponents of this position argue that it is time consuming to use face to face communication.
.... I think this is disturbing your flow. You are going to justify why you believe face to face communication is better. So you better stick to that. If you mentioned about this opposing view, then you need prove that it does not make much sense. That you have not done in this para.