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Factors contributing to job satisfaction and the prospect of job satisfaction for all workers.


Veranda 5 / 13 4  
Aug 18, 2019   #1

what for to love a job?



TOPIC: As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing.
What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

MY ESSAY:
How enjoyable people feel when they are at work is one of the main measures for their welfare because adults spend a colossal amount of time on working. In my opinion, there are three factors compounding the feeling of satisfaction and the prospects of all workers being satisfied is not practical.

It is undeniable that job satisfaction is greatly impacted by external not personal elements. Firstly, salaries earned by workers determine whether they iare happy with their jobs. For example, a high payment can act as a financial incentive which makes employees feel more content with their jobs. Secondly, the potential of promotion is also an important element involved. People would feel more satisfied when they know they can achieve a higher position as a result of hard work. Finally, workplace environment such as communication with colleagues and managers plays an crucial role in determining the degree of job satisfaction.

Although many companies try their best to fulfill work expectations coming from their staff, it is hard to induce satisfaction in all workplaces. Because most firms place an emphasis on the performance of employees, many workers cannot receive a high salary due to their poor conducts. Another reason is that segregation still exists in a dozens of organizations, especially in terms of sex. In many countries, women receive a much lower chance of promotion compared to that of men.

In conclusion, with all three features involved in job satisfaction, it is hard to see its prospect of ever being ubiquitous.

Maria [Contributor] - / 1,032 371  
Aug 18, 2019   #2
@Veranda
Hi. Welcome here once more. I hope to give you useful writing feedback on your essay.

Firstly, appreciate the beauty of simplified and yet clear language when writing. It is critical that you do not merely write with the usage of heavy words. Rather, focus immensely on the overall flow of your writing. Focus on prioritizing information to add depth. Take a look at your first paragraph. You were unable to clarify the direction of writing because of your focus on overexplaining.

Aside from this, the second and third paragraph are both sufficient. It only went a bit downhill with the last paragraph due to the lack of analysis that would wrap up the entirety of the writing. Bear this in mind.
OP Veranda 5 / 13 4  
Aug 18, 2019   #3
@Maria
Thank you very much


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