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Families that suffered from poverty in Australia - ielts writing tast 1


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Dec 8, 2021   #1

poverty-stricken Australian families



the table lists the data regarding the percentage of different types of families that suffered from poverty in Australia in 1999.
overall, it is clear that there was about one tenth of Australia households living in poor condition with the number reaches approximately 1.83 million families. the sole parent family was the highest portion compare to other categories.

as the data suggest, the family that contains sole parent was needy accounting for over one fifth of total Australia households. the second highest belongs to the single parent family without any children, which formed 19% with the number of 359 thousand poor families. Moreover. the percentages of couple parents without children was impoverished much lower than that of single parent family, accounting for 7%. It is very surprising that there was a big gap in the number of poor family between the elder citizens and the younger ones. the aged couple household was destitute accou.nting for the lowest portion in the given data. Last but not least, the percentage of single aged person who was poverty-stricken formed 6% of total Australia families.
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Dec 8, 2021   #2
The first reason why this essay will get a failing score is the fact that it totally disregards the grammar rules for English writing. You are not even trying to properly write in English. The first word of every sentence is always capitalized. You inconsistently did that in this essay, You will fail the grammar section as you show a total disregard for English writing rules.

Since you did not upload the image for reference, I cannot say that your summary overview is accurate either. How can I trust that the data you are sharing is correct then? You did not even properly divide the presentation into 3 paragraphs.

You do not seem to be concerned about the validity and accuracy of your reporting essay at this point. Why are you even bothering to do this practice test? It is obvious you are not concerned about passing the actual test anyway. Why are you even wasting your time with this exercise then? You do not even try to meet the minimum 3 paragraph requirement for the presentation. You do not even try to create a more interesting analysis of the data provided. Very little analysis is used in your presentation. Nothing is properly nor completely developed based on the image data.

Your total lack of interest in the test preparation also leaves me disinterested in further helping you with your review for this test. If you want to get advice from me again, do a better job with your task presentation. At least show you are taking it seriously and that you are focused on passing the test by following the minimal and proper requirements for the presentation.
Sonny Tran 2 / 3  
Dec 8, 2021   #3
@trangtit your essay must have 3 paragraphs.


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