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Family environment is the base for the children to be good members of society


Nadaish 1 / -  
Oct 14, 2013   #1
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about who have the responsibility to teach the children to be good members of society. While some people agree with the idea that school is the place to learn good attitudes. I believe that both the parents and school are responsible to make children aware of their importance to be good members of society.

The family environment is the base for the children that parents should work hard to raise their children on good behave with love and acceptance. Anyways, I think the parents should be the first role models in their children's life, they have to be the good individuals at first to make their children imitate them.

On the other hand, school responsibility will be easy to handle this task if the parents at home make such effort by raising their children with good manners. In addition, the school activities such as, national days activities and ideal student competitions, emphasise the importance of how to be good student and good individual. Also, the teacher role does not limited on teaching text books only.

In conclusion, parents and school are responsible and have their important role to make children good society members.

leoking 7 / 24 1  
Oct 14, 2013   #2
in the second para, you could give some further example to further explain why parents are important for children.

also, in the conclusion, you could restate your opinion including brief summary from above idea
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Oct 14, 2013   #3
The family environment is the base for the children that parents should work hard to raise their children on good behavebehavior with love and acceptance.

Well... in the body paragraphs, you need to give reasons to justify your position in the argument. What is the reason here that you use to justify your moderate position? Give more emphasis to that;

First, it is the family that lays the foundation for the development of any child.
Now elaborate on this reason to align it more with your prompt;
Therefore, parents being the main players in the family set up have a great responsibility in shaping up desired behaviors of their children to become good members in society.

Now give a specific example to support the reason ( you haven't done this in the essay);
For example, if a father is an alcoholic and behaves bad in front of his children, then that situation may negatively affect his children's behavioral patterns too.


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