Topic:
Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for the achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the modern world where celebrity culture is pervasive and slowly becoming the norm in highly developed metropolitan areas, there is a phenomenon, decried by traditionalists as "superficial and harmful", that is "famous for being famous". In other words, this means the state of being well-known, sometimes internationally, not for one's accomplishments but for publicity stunts and associations with the celebrity world. Personally, I have a balanced and nuanced view on whether this has a negative influence on younger generations.
First and foremost, being famous for one's glamour, wealth and personal connections might overemphasize the importance of one's outward appearance over inner strengths and talents. This can lead people astray as beauty fades and one's contributions to the society are what truly last and make an impact. Moreover, to always maintain a presentable exterior, portray a larger-than-life personality and lead a lavish lifestyle requires a lot of resources which are usually not sustainable and accessible to the aspiring youngsters. Therefore, the extra borrowing to cover the costs might plunge these individuals into financial and emotional distress.
However, celebrity status, regardless of whether that comes from achievements or stunts, does confer benefits to holders of such status and is indicative of the greater, overarching society. It is common knowledge that viral Instagrammers or Hollywood socialites are now earning 6-figure amounts for each post on social media. In addition, the fame and social connections which follow, more often than not, compensate for the initial investments and bring long-term non-monetary benefits, such as finding a wealthy spouse or wielding political power. These unsaid and unwritten bonuses are also driving forces behind the celebrity culture in many economic, financial and cultural centers of the world today.
In summary, I believe that the state of being a celebrity, even without personal excellence, provides tremendous benefits for status holders. This explains the current trend of "famous for being famous" that is prevalent across social media and global metropolises.
(Start: 9:34, end: 10:01, 4 October 2022, total time: 27 minutes, 324 words)
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Writer's note: I would greatly appreciate it if you could grade my writing and provide recommendations. Thanks.
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4783 Scoring is a private service that you will have to contact me for via the email address listed below. The essay will not receive a passing score anyway since the writer did not provide the required single opinion discussion a required. So scoring this essay individually, even in private will be a futile exercise. All because the writer misunderstood the prompt instruction and therefore, did not meet the task discussion requirements.
The main reason for the failing score is simple, this is a single opinion essay, not a comparative one that allows for a nuanced and balance discussion presentation. The guide question is clear, pick one measured opinion side to discuss in the essay and explain why that opinion should be considered acceptable or correct. By setting up his own discussion question and personal response consideration, he changed the discussion topic, as well as the response requirement and therefore, no longer provided an applicable discussion format / presentation.
When it is clear that the test taker did not understand what the writing requirement for the test is, the quickness by which he wrote the essay, the number of words that were used, even the vocabulary become moot. These will not help him pass the test for any reason.
Similarly, in my opinion, the topic is about a single opinion essay, which doesn't require you to compare both. So your essay can be a little bit mislead, which is difficult for the reading to follow.
