Is fashion harmful to society? Nowadays,this is controversial issue.I think that fashion is harmful to society.I am going to enumerate reason of my choice.
To begin with,fashion makes children worry about their size.Because of fashion,children lose self-esteem and they emulate model.They try to become size zero.It bring about blumia.
Secondly,fashion causes to much waste of time and money.People spend money on thing which is pointless unceasingly for the sake of fashion.It makes people look silly.Another point is that waste of time.People focus on just fashion instead of education and work.
Last but not least,fashion leads to discrimination.People bias each other as to what they wear.It causes to seperate their social group.Besides people look exterior beauty regardless of inner beauty.
To sum up,race of fashion never end.People continue to pursue fashion.They never satisfied.
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