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IELTS- : favorite pastime of people in different countries


nguyenminh 3 / 4  
Jul 30, 2011   #1
Please give me some suggestion about grammar, structure in my post. Thank you so much :D
The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
From 30 - 50 years old
TV Sport Reading Hobbies Music Beach Sleep
Canada 60 22 15 40 3 0 2
France / / 30 20 4 / /
England / / 30 21 4 / 20
Australia 65 30 15 45 5 30 4
Korea 22 21 60 45 2 2 4
China 15 25 60 50 0 5 5
USA 60 23 15 42 23 30 2
Japan / / 62 / / / /

This table shows and compares favorite pastime of people from 30 to 50 years old in eight different countries. It is clear that TV, reading and hobbies are the most popular activities that people want to do in free time.

In North America and Australia, people like watching TV, 60% people consider TV as a main preferable one. One third of people in Australia and USA prefer going to beach, but no one in Canada want to do it. Sleeping is the least popular activity in this group.

In East Asia, two third of people love reading, it is three times as much as in North America and Australia. A half people in Korea and China like hobbies, however, they do not think listening music is a kind of entertainment in free time. People in Japan do not like to share what they do in their spare time accept reading.

Like Japan, people in Europe do not want to share too much about their favorite pastime activities. In two countries England and France, 30% and 4% people prefer reading and music, while one fifth like hobbies. Especially, English people enjoy sleeping the most with 20%.

In conclusion, people from different nations or continents like to do different favorite activities when they have free time. In general, people like doing something at home such as watching TV, reading... rather than outdoor activities.



EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Jul 31, 2011   #2
It is clear that TV, reading and hobbies are the most popular activities that people want to do in their free time.

In North America and Australia, people like watching TV, and 60% people consider TV as a main pastime .

One third of the people in Australia and USA prefer going to the beach, but no one in Canada wants to do it.

Sleeping is the least popular activity in this group.

In East Asia, two thirds of the people love reading, andthat is three times as much as in North America and Australia.

Half of the people in Korea and China like hobbies, however, they do not think listening to music is a kind of entertainment in their free time.

People in Japan do not like to share what they do in their spare time except reading.---Many people confuse the different spellings of accept/except...I accept the fact that except for me, people spell it wrong.

In two countries, England and France, 30% and 4% of people prefer reading and music, while one fifth like hobbies.

:)
OP nguyenminh 3 / 4  
Sep 23, 2011   #3
thank for your comments :)


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