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'female dominance' - IELTS-post-school qualifications by gender in Australia 1999

ansergeyg 2 / 3  
May 9, 2012   #1
Hi. I've tried to decribe the chart. Could anyone highlight all the mistakes in my description so I could work on them. I've read a lot of ielts related materials and tried to apply them :)), but I'm not sure about the correctness of what I did.

The bar chart comapres figures for different rates of post-school qualifications between men and women in Australia in 1999.

It is obvious from the chart that in three out of five given post-school qualifications the percentage of men was higher than that of women.

The figure for men with skilled vocational diploma was at 90%, compared to just 10% of women. The proportion of male postgraduates to female postgraduates was 70% to 30%. The difference between those with master's degree was not that significant, but still rather apperent, with the benefit of men at 60% to 40%.

Bachelor's degree and undergraduate diploma were the two qualifications with female dominance. The percentage of female undergraduates at 65% was almost twofold higher than that of male undergraduates at 35%. The proportion of women to men with bachelor's degree were pretty equal 55% to 45%.

Interestingly, that the difference between the two post-school qualifications with female dominace and the two qualificatons with male dominance where pretty similar, in comparison with skilled vocational diploma.

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EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
May 10, 2012   #2
I have thoroughly reviewed the chart, as well as your analysis of it, per my job requirement :) and can find not a single flaw in your presentation. I'm not sure if you felt there was definite need for correction or were discouraged in some way, but as far as I can see, this is spot-on! I hope that my review and reassurance has helped you! Good job, good luck and have fun in school!
OP ansergeyg 2 / 3  
May 10, 2012   #3
Thank you very much. I had doubts about the language of "comparison" and all these things related to proportions, but as you said it was ok, it dispelled all my doubts. Is it ok if I add a few more essays for reviewing?

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