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TASK 1 - the figure for households getting access to different kind of up-to-date home appliances


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May 6, 2021   #1

Domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK



The provided line graph illustrates the figure for households getting access to different kind of up-to-date home appliances including CD player, Mobile phone, home computer, and internet access in the UK in the period between 1996 and 2003.

Overall, it is clear that there was an upward trend in the number of these all 4 devices in the given year. while CD players were most used, internet access seemed be least prevalent compared to others.

In 1996/1997, 60% of families in the UK used CD players. This figure continuously increased remarkably to over 80% by more than 20% at the end of the period. By contrast, there was no Internet access in 1996/97 until 1998/99 when it appeared and occupied for 10%. Moreover, in the following years, the UK witnessed a considerable rise in the proportion of the Internet and reach about 40% in 2002/03.

As for the others, the figures for home computer and mobile phone stood at about 27% and proximately 20% in 1996/97 respectively. In the period between 1998/99 and 2000/21, the latter surpassed the former at the point of about 37% and tended to increase considerably to just 70% while this one for home computer stopped at 57% at the end of the given time.

Thanks for your watching and correcting my writing ^^



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May 6, 2021   #2
The task 1 essay requires to summarize the information using less than 200 words. Representing the summarized and analyzed data within 175- 190 words willbe more than sufficient to help prove your English analytical and short reporting skills. Bear in mind that you are writing for an audience of professionals who have only a feew minutes to spare in reading your work. The more scannable your work, while keeping it understandable to an English native speaker, the better your final score will be.

With regards to the summary, you missed presenting the percentage measurement indicator which is a necessary aspect of the information summary. Please remember to review and edit your work for grammar accuracy. You failed to capitalize the first word of a new sentence. Your rush to write a long piece rather than a quality piece have left this paper prone to uncorrected enors, this creating more score deduction areas for your final score. Even the slightest ensor can result in a failure for your test. Create quality work rather than word quantity. Word count reliant essays more often fail than pass this test.

You show a good presentation formatting eye that is focused on GRA considerations. Although admirable, this essay is too wordy and uses words of uncertainty where preciseness is required. There is a good scoring potential here. You just need to learn to properly develop a suitable writing style for the Task 1 essay [


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