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Writing Task 1 - The figure for marriages and divorces in the UK over a period of 25 years


pha 2 / 3 1  
May 17, 2020   #1

the number of marriages and divorces in the UK



The line chart illustrates the figure for marriages and divorces in the UK over a period of 25 years, from 1975 to 2000. Overall, the number of total marriages experienced a gradual increase whereas the number of 1st marriages decreased and the figure for divorces rose.

In 1975, there were about 500 thousands of marriages and continued to increase dramatically in the next 10 years, reached a peak of over 600 thousands of marriages in 1985. Despite a gradual decrease in 1995, the figure rose again at the end of the period, about 570000. By contrast, the numbers of first marriages rose from 330000 marriages to over 400000 from 1975 to 1985 before falling rapidly to just over 300000 in 2000.

It can be easily to be seen that the figure for 2nd marriages was only about 180000 in 1975, it then increased steadily to 250000 by the end of the period. Despite being just about 80000 divorces in 1975, the number experienced an exponential increase to reached a peak of 250000 by 2000, at times overtaking the figures for second marriages.




hhoaianhh2905 2 / 2  
May 17, 2020   #2
there were about 500 thousands of marriages and continued to increase dramatically in the next 10 years, reached a peak of over 600 thousands of marriages in 1985.. I think you should divide it into 2 separate sentences.

It can be easily to be seen. Maybe it should be : " It can be easily seen "
Holt [Contributor] - / 8,568 2485  
May 17, 2020   #3
There are certain grammar situations wherein the singular form of a word is the same as the plural. Thousand is one of these types of words. When it comes to presenting the numerical form, 500 thousand is already the plural form. In order to avoid making this mistake in the future, which will result in GRA points deductions, it would be better for you to use the numerical form (500000) rather than the word form. You should also take note of the verb formations in your presentation. It is incorrect to say "increase to reached a peak..." The correct sentence formation is "increased to reach a peak" The time reference should be within the verb "increase" not "reach".

By the way, you were short one sentence in the summary overview. You forgot to mention the measurement type used in relation to the numerical value in the thousands. You also did not do a complete comparison discussion of the chart. If you look at the figures for 1190, there was an overlap in the presentation for divorces and second marriages. The instruction for this essay included a discussion point for "make comparisons where necessary", the overlap in information is one of the important comparison points of the essay.
OP pha 2 / 3 1  
May 17, 2020   #4
@Holt
Thanks for your comment to my essay .Here is my revised essay after reading your comment. It would be an pleasure for me if you also score my writing .

The line chart illustrates the figure for marriages and divorces in the UK from 1975 to 2000.
Overall, the number of total marriages experienced a gradually increase whereas the number of 1st marriages decreased slightly. It can also be seen that there was an overlap between 2nd marriages and divorces from 1990 to the end of the period

In 1975, there were about 500000 marriages and continued to increase dramatically in the next 10 years, reached a peak of over 600000 in 1985. Despite a gradual decrease in 1995, the figure rose again at the end of the period, about 570000. By contrast, the number of first marriages rose from 330000 to over 400000 from 1975 to 1985 before falling rapidly to just over 300000 in 2000.

On the other hand, the figure for 2nd marriages was only about 180000 in 1975, it then increased steadily to 250000 by the end of the period. Despite being just about 80000 divorces in 1975, the number experienced an exponential increase and overtook the figure for 2nd marriages in 1990 before reaching a peak of 250000 in 2000, overlapped with the number of 2nd marriages.


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