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The figure of an old Japanese man and women in the past, today and in the next 40 years


asmaraj96 9 / 11  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
Writing Task 1: Japan's Population in the Past, Present and Future Trends

The given bar charts and table show the proportion of Japan's citizens entirely over a century, from 1950 to 2055 measured in million, and a part of them aged more than 65-years old identified in only four years: 1950, 2005, 2035, and 2055. Overall, it can be seen clearly that there is a gradual increase of Japan's residents during over a half century between 1950 and 2005 and predicted will experience a sharp decline in the future, while Japanese aged over-65s have the highest number in 2035.

According to the data, the total of people in Japan grew gradually from 84.1 to 127.8 million between 1950 and 2005. In 2005, it was the highest number of Japan's population, while the people aged over 65 years in 2035 reaching 37.2 million. However, it predicted will drop dramatically almost reaching population number in the first period.

By contrast, the proportion of over-65s residents in 1950 had a small percentage of total population about 4.9%. Over 50 years, it experienced an increase about fourfold from the previous identified year. Afterwards, the total Japanese aged over-65s will increase in the last period of given data, being nearly a half of total population.

abangabul93 15 / 27  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hallo @asmaraj96, I got some suggestions for your writing:

The given bar charts and table show ...
... that there is (WAS) a gradual increase of (...) 1950 and 2005 and predicted will experience (WILL BE PREDICTED TO DECLINE SHARPLY) a sharp decline in the future, while ...

... over 65 years in 2035 reaching (REACHED) 37.2 million. However, it predicted will drop (WILL BE EXPECTED TO DROP) dramatically almost ...

... an increase about (A) fourfold from the ...


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