Finding safe replacement powers which have less side-effects on environment are vital in the world.

Importance of exploration and development of safe alternative to fossil fuels

The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today.
To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

It is undeniable that fossil fuels are still our main source of energy. Finding safe replacement powers which have less side-effects on environment are vital in the world. I will explain it in details in the following paragraphs.

Day by day, the scale of using fossil fuels continues to grow in every corner of the world. In other words, developed countries use fossil fuels to develop their industries and economics while developing countries have no other choices. Moreover, it is obvious for all human kinds that global warming and the damage to the protective ozone layer are caused by carbon dioxide and other by-products of fossil fuels. Therefore, I certainly agree these problems are global rather than national ones.

while some countries take advantages of using safer energy sources like wind, water and solar power, it seems that these alternatives are not easy to reach for all countries. I mean, the technology for producing energy from these natural sources is both sophisticated and expensive. Then, investing in research and development to make renewable energies more convenient , should be a global priority.

some may argue that the universe faces more important difficulties like poverty and diseases. But , I think the energy problem is the most important priority because the consequences of this issue are extremely vast and it can threaten all living beings.

To conclude, I strongly agree with the given statement and removing obstacles for developing safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most pressing global priority.

Hello,
This essay is good but just mistakes if you take care of, you will enhance it.
First of all, the ending statement is quite short and not important; you just repeated the question which can result in unfavorable ramifications.
Second, you were not aware of the capital letters in each paragraph. Just like "while" and "some", all these can be harmful to your holistic essay.

third, some grammatical mistakes that you must take care of to improvew your essay:
"have less side-effects on environment are vital in" This noun is missing a determiner before it. just like "the"
"while some countries take advantages of using" if you want to make "advantages" then I think you can add " a lot" or "myriad". to leave it plural or you can make it singular.

Over all, your essay is very convenient and has strong reasons. I hope this help.

Mosi,. this essay will automatically get a failing TA score because you changed the prompt discussion requirements. You have not structured the essay to respond to the given question which is:

Original Prompt: To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.
Your Response: Finding safe replacement powers which have less side-effects on environment are vital in the world. I will explain it in details in the following paragraphs.

Based on this major error, it is clear that you did not understand the question being asked, which is why you did not respond to the question properly. Hence, the essay will automatically get a failing TA score, which is a significant part of the scoring consideration. That is why a test taker who fails the TA section will automatically find that his essay will get a failing score.

TA MIstake + Other errors = Non-Passing Score

Due to this, I cannot even continue to review your essay for other errors, nor correct them. You did not follow the discussion prompt, this essay will not pass. You should have paraphrased and responded to the question in a manner similar to this:

It is said that humans need to find a safe alternative to non-renewal fuel sources. That is why there is a keen desire to find and harness these other sources of energy across the world. I am in total agreement that other sources of fuel and energy need to be discovered and enhanced worldwide for several reasons.

Thanks for your feedback, I'll notice your points in my future essays