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The Finland's will more focus on developing of an alternative energy, rather than the coal.


Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Nov 29, 2016   #1
Finland set to become first country to ban coal use for energy

Based on Peter Lund, a researcher from university of Aalto, say Finland will become the first country in the world which prohibits coal usage for energy to anticipate climate change issues and change to the renewable energy such wind power. The Finland's council will more focus on developing of alternative energy and the council poured more than 80 million euro to enhance the capacity. It means that power plants use coal will close which provide only 8 percent from total amount of energy in Finland. Not only Finland as a pioneer, another country such as UK, Austria and Netherlands also ban coal as a raw material for their power plant in 2023. Their hope with that plan can reduce emissions and global warming.

source: Newscientist

ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Nov 29, 2016   #2
Dioba,
Here's my analysis towards your article summary. I hope you can follow through.

- Based on Peter Lund, a researcher from the U niversity of Aalto, saysaid that Finland will become...
- The Finland's council/officials will more focus more on developing of alternative energy, (comma needed) and the council pouredpours/spends more than 80...
- It means that power plants that use coal will close which provide only 8 percent from total amount of energy in Finland.(I have no idea why this part is quite confusing. Try to simplify your sentence pattern.)

- Not only is Finland as a pioneer, another countrythe other countries such as UK, Austria ...
- TheirThey hope with that plan they can reduce ...

As you can see, your summary suffered from grammatical issues. Some sentences are even difficult to understand. My suggestion is that try to write in a simple way possible that can easily be understood by others. Remember, clarity is a MUST. :)


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