peterwhite 1 / 1 Oct 9, 2011 #1"Last Thursday was really sad day in my life. As usual I got up at 8:00 am and I turned on the television but that day was different, the journalist said: "Steve Jobs died with 56 years". When I heard this news I did not believe. Steve Jobs was a perfect CEO, genius in business and he had a visionary view with their products.All my life I used Apple products: iPad, iMac and MacBook. Steve changed the live of many people with their minimalism and usable products. Most people compare Steve Jobs with a genius like Edison who invented the bulb. He started his company in a garage with a friend, without much money.Five years ago I watched my favourite speech about life and business, Steve Jobs realized this beautiful speech in Stanford University. He talk about his live, he had a cancer in 2005. Moreover, he explained as he fired from his own company and how returned years later.Finally, I think that the world lost more than a normal person. After Jobs dead all important persons in the world said beautiful words about Jobs. Rest in peace Steve."Please, be critical! :)I have big problems with my writing. I think that I can take a good mark in reading, listening and speaking part...but is possible that i will achieve a low score in writing part :(If any of you have any interesting links for improve essay for TOEFL exam...THANKS!
OP peterwhite 1 / 1 Oct 9, 2011 #4Thanks.More than 300 or around 300?Thanks...I cannot write in a hurry. Thanks! :)
richard35568 6 / 14 Oct 9, 2011 #5More than 300, around 400 will be better if time permitted:)u can illustrate more reasons & examples in ur essay btw.
argentum 3 / 9 Oct 9, 2011 #6a normal person ---> an ordinary personall important persons ---> all important peoplesaid beautiful words about Jobs ---> said beautiful words about himhe explained as he fired from his own company ---> he explained how he got fired from his own companyMost people compare Steve Jobs with a genius ---> most people compare him to a geniusLast Thursday was really sad day in my life ---> Last Thursday was really a sad day of my lifeSteve Jobs died with 56 years ---> Steve Jobs died at the age of 56Five years ago I watched my favourite speech about life and business, Steve Jobs realized this beautiful speech in Stanford University ---> I think it's not coherent