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In the first stage of the black tea manufacture the farmers picking fresh tea leaves from fields


dina79 20 / 26 3  
Apr 7, 2016   #1
The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.

The diagram illustrates two kind processes to produce of black tea. While the black tea results from a several step in one direction, the firing is the end system to lost the moisture.

In the first stage, the farmers picking fresh tea leaves when the good qualities become from only bud and two top leaves Afterwards, the withering process to leaves the whole on rack by 60% moisture out. The next process separate in traditional method to generate loose tea and modern method to create tea bags.

The traditional technique leaves rolled flat and broken with followed by the release of enzymes from them. To contrast, in the modern technique that leaves cut, torn, and curled to create the smaller granular pieces. Moreover, the both of process will be come in step of oxidation with the rolled leaves on tiles or cement, so that leaves change to copper colour by combining enzymes to air. In the final step, the crucial part in oven and get result by moisture out at 97% and the other side released flavour with aroma from them




liv_ryu 13 / 22 6  
Apr 7, 2016   #2
Hi Dina, several parts of your essay are not appropriate enough, let me give you several suggestions:
1. Ensure your word is singular or plural
- good qualities good quality
- two kind processes two kinds of processes
- a several step several steps
2. This is my alternative introduction:
For example : [quote]The diagram illustrates two kind processes to produce ...quote]
The given diagram illustrates the procedure for manufacturing black tea. Overall, it can be seen that there are 2 methods, traditional and modern.


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