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IELTS - Fish and meat consumption - Writing Task


khof 1 / -  
Feb 13, 2013   #1
Would you please give me some comments for my article. I am not very good at English so please point me out if I made any mistake.

The graph shows the consumption of fish and different types of meat in a European country in 25 years.

Generally speaking, chicken, was the only type of meat that had a rose in consumption, whereas other kinds of meat including fish, recorded a fell in numbers.

In 1979, beef was the most consumed but it was substituted by chicken in 1989. There was a significant drop for beef, from about 225 grams in 1979 to only 100 grams in 2004. On the contrary, the consumption of chicken rose rapidly, from approximately 150 to 250 grams through one-fourth of a century.

The consumption of lamb, like the situation of beef, was decreased gradually. In 1979, it was the second-most consumed meat and it ranked third after 25 years.

Fish was the least consumed meat in the country. Although fish is unregarded, it received a slight fall too. In 1979, every citizen ate about 60 grams of it every week. After 25 years, they ate 20 grams less.




Maths - / 1  
Feb 13, 2013   #2
I think it's better to have a conclusion. Like the change of the popularity of food in this country.
And does the writing have enough words?
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 13, 2013   #3
Hi

Would you please give me some comments for my article. I am not very good at English so please point me out if I made any mistake.

Well... I found the following website that offers help for this task and hope it would be helpful to you;
/ielts-writing-task-1.html ....Hope you can access the page. I feel it's a good structure to follow and this is how your answer should be structured;

1.Introduce the graph ....The graph illustrates the trends in consumption of fish and different types of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
2.Give an overview ...While chicken consumption shows a continues growth during this twenty five year period, fish and other types of meat show a declining trend in their consumption levels. However, the declining trend of fish had been at fairly a moderate level in contrast to sharp declining trends of Beef and Lamb consumption.

3.Give the detail .... here you must discuss details of the graphs with more data and statistics.
Hope you now have an idea of how to structure this answer :)


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