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IELTS TASK I Fitnes Membership


Purwati Ayu 7 / 14 2  
Feb 20, 2014   #1
  The bar chart depicts about number of women and men who as fitness membership for three decades since 1970 till 2000.
  Overall, Bar chart fluctuates every five years but female members chart is slightly more stable in point between 1000 and approximately three thousand users. However amount of male fitness member is higher in four years.

  Beginning from 1970, there was more than 2000 men join as fitness members. Rising double marked five years later. While two periods next to it fell under 2000 people, it rose again touching the highest number, 5000 men listed as fitness membership. Unfortunately it declined significantly as 80% in last chart.

  The women membership moved up and down in every points. Two highest numbers of women membership happened in 1985 and 1995 nearly 3000 females. Also the lowest point was in 1970 with a thousand members but after that the members never always more than 1700 female members. Interestingly, both of female and male fitness membership had the same lowest sum with a thousand members.




dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 20, 2014   #2
The bar chart depictsillustrates theabout number of women and men who asheld fitness membership for three decades since 1970 till 2000.

Overall, Bar chart fluctuates every five years

Bar chart has not fluctuated, but the numbers of memberships have fluctuated.

Overall, Bar chart fluctuates every five years but female members chart is slightly more stable in point between 1000 and approximately three thousand users. However amount of male fitness member is higher in four years.

You give only an overview of the graphical presentation in the bar chart. You don't discuss any details with the support of data in the overview.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Feb 20, 2014   #3
Beginning from 1970, there was more than 2000 menjoinwho joined as fitness members. Rising double marked five years later.????? While two periods next to it fell under 2000 people, it rose again touching the highest number, 5000 men listed as fitness membership. Unfortunately it declined significantly as 80% in last chart.

You need to pay lots of attention to grammar :( This you need to re do for sure :) Also, remember this is to test your report writing skills. So you need to adopt a report writing style.

In 1970, there had been 2000 male memberships which grew double to 4000 memberships in five years time.


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