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Five Wild Lionesses grow a mane and Start Acting Like Males


Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
Five lionesses found in Botswana have grown a mane and are showing male-like behaviours. One is even roaring and mounting other females. This anomaly has started studying by Geoffrey D. Gilfillan at the University of Sussex in Falmer UK, and he stated that lioness is mostly female in behaviour and she also has some male behaviours, such as increased scent-marking and roaring.

Luke Hunter, president and chief at global wild cat conservation explained that a maned lioness is caused by increased level of testosterone and high levels of testosterone due to a problem in her ovaries. While some manned lioness is observed mating, none of them became pregnant. The test revealed high levels of androgens such as testosterone in females. Hunter says that must be a genetic component in this population underlying the phenomenon.
Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
Hello Yonathan
I have an advice to you

Five lionesses found in Botswana have grown a mane and are showing male-like behaviours
Five lionesses= subject
found= verb
in Botswana= adverb of place
have grown= verb
a mane....=object

.....you should use conjunction to combine one sentence and another


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