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(flexibility / tactfulness / fairness) important qualities of a good supervisor


zaid_86 2 / 4  
Feb 1, 2011   #1
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In my opinion, there are several qualities that a good boss should have. According to my personal experience, three points summarize the most important characteristics that a good manager must have. First, the manager should not be too flexible, neither too strict all the time. The professional supervisor should know when the situation requires him to be flexible in dealing with his subordinates and identify the time in which he/she should be serious. For example, the manager who tend to should show an understanding attitude when one of his employees gets to work late because of an urgent incident that happened with him, will raise his employees' loyality and respect. On the other hand, he/she should not tolerate a slow work progress in a project which its deadline is approaching soon. In addition, a good supervisor should respect his team members point of view, even if it is contradicting with his opinion, he/she should not try to impose his perspective without discussing it with his co-workers and explaining the advantages of his ideas, in that way the other employees will have respect for this manager and trust his work methodology. Finally, objectivity and fairness is a very essential trait for a boss, a good boss should be fair, treat each of his co-workers in the same respectful way, without differentiating them in treatment, regardless of the gender, position or age of the employee who is dealing with. By doing so, the supervisor will gain trust and admiration of all the people in the work place. In conclusion, the good boss who is understanding, respecting others opinions and treating every co-worker equally, will influence the performance of his/her subordinate and create a competitive enjoyable atmosphere at the work place, making everyone enjoying the work time period instead of feeling stressed or bored.
khushiGul 3 / 13  
Feb 1, 2011   #2
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For example, the manager who tend to should show an understanding attitude when one of his employees gets to work late because of an urgent incident that happened with him,

On the other hand, he/she should not tolerate a slow work progress in a project which its deadline is approaching soon. In addition, a good supervisor should respect his team members point of view, even if it is contradicting with his opinion, he/she should not try to impose his perspective without discussing it with his co-workers and explaining the advantages of his ideas, in that way the other employees will have respect for thistheir manager and trust his work methodology.

Your writing is good but need some structure.
Make paragraphs depending on subject and try to write introduction part effectively.
little_wingg 3 / 2  
Feb 5, 2011   #3
Hello, zaid_86

In my opinion, there are several qualities that a good boss should have. According to my personal experience, three points summarize the most important characteristics that a good manager must have. According to my personal experience, A good manager/leader/supervisor should posses three significant characteristics.

First, the manager should not be too flexible, neither too strict all the time.The professional supervisor should know when the situation requires him to be flexible in dealing with his subordinates and identify the time in which he/she should be serious. For example, the manager who tend to should show an understanding attitude when one of his employees gets to work late because of an urgent incident that happened with him, will raise his employees' loyality and respect. On the other hand, he/she should not tolerate a slow work progress in a project which its deadline is approaching soon.

I modified the paragraph.
First, the manager should know how to react to each situation. He should know when he should be flexible or when he should be strict. For example, if his subordinate has to get to work late because of emergency situation, he should show sympaty and understanding of this problem. He will let his subordinate start working late without blaming him. Moreover, his response to this situation will make his subordinate respect and be loyal to him.

For example, the manager who tend to should show an understanding attitude when one of his employees gets to work late because of an urgent incident that happened with him, will raise his employees' loyality and respect. This sentence is hard to understand and have wrong structure especially on the red letters.
OP zaid_86 2 / 4  
Feb 5, 2011   #4
khushiGul, thank you for your feedback,
but can you specify more details about "Make paragraphs depending on subject" ?

little_wingg, thank you very much for your corrections.
the parts that you modified are much better than my phrases, I will consider them in my next essays.
(and regarding the last comment, I am really embarrassed that I haven't noticed such a mistake )
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Feb 9, 2011   #5
I think what he meant is this: For every idea, start a new paragraph.

Intro paragraph:
In my opinion, there are several qualities that a good boss should have. According to my personal experience, three points summarize the most important characteristics that a good manager must have. They include flexibility, respect, and objectivity. I think these three qualities make the manager ___________ (complete this thesis statement.) END OF 1ST PARAGRAPH.

Paragraph 2:
First, the manager should not be too flexible, neither too ...

Paragraph 3:
In addition, a good supervisor should respect his team---See? We start a new paragraph for the new topic.

Paragraph 4:
Finally, objectivity and fairness is a are very essential triats ...


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