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Flying all over the world. IELTS Task 2: Should air travel be restricted or NOT.

sumanmahajan 1 / 1  
Jan 22, 2017   #1
Question : Some people think the air travel should be restricted because it causes environment pollution. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and relevant example.

Air travel pros and cons

Air travel; although a dream travel for many people, is prevalent world wide now a days. It has a great contribution towards globalization and has made possible for people to travel to any destination but, at the same time comes with negative repercussions like global warming and extensive usage of non - renewable resources. If we discuss restriction of air travel, I totally disagree with this idea and would share my opinions in the following passages.

Collaboration among countries for development and business exchange has gone to such a high level and this has become possible only after advent of extensive air travel options. for instance, USA being the center of all operations and people from rest of world keep travelling. Considering the distances between USA and India, it is impossible to travel by bus or ship. Shipping of products is also being done via air mode which saves lot of time and money.

I would consider another example of exporting Alphonso mangoes to various part of world; major percentage would be rotten if shipped by water transport and many countries would not even order. Change is permanent; we cannot survive with older ways if keep aspirations to become advance and grow.

In another important circumstances air travel is savior and that is air ambulance. In recent past, a news hit the newspaper that a human lever was transported quickly to another city and saved a life which would not been possible by road travel

Definitely, it is impossible to invent something with any negative impact and so is travel by air. Global warming and fer of exhaustion of expensive resources are obvious examples. Restricting air travel completely can never be an option but governments from different countries come up together can keep a check on over use of this. For instance, every individual especially in a developing country has this listed in her bucket list to travel in a plane however, opulent business executives travel by air even for short distances. This has become status symbol for many. How can this be reduced is altogether a different topic and certainly not easy.

In nut shell, in my opinion, governments should take some actions to reduce the environmental issues and individuals should do a bit from their side too. Air travel is an important part of our lives to survive in modern era and cannot be restricted in most of the cases.

diamante 1 / 6 2  
Jan 22, 2017   #2
A good piece... some corrections are... But government from different countries can work together to keep a check on its excessive usage. It should be How this can be reduced... In a nut shell...i don't think you should write "in my opinion "...Goodluck
Rashan 2 / 9 2  
Jan 22, 2017   #3
Rather than starting with a general statement why don't you share your personal story of air travel( can be fabricated)?and instead of saying"share my opinion in following passage" it would be best if you just the reasons why you disagree.
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,690 2048  
Jan 22, 2017   #4
Suman, the prompt specifically asks you to discuss environmental pollution as one of the reasons as to why air travel should be restricted. It is important that the major facts that you present in your paraphrased statement use keywords from the original prompt in order to prove that you understand the question and that you will be discussing it along the lines dictated by the prompt. Therefore, when you presented the discussion of global warming and non-renewable resources instead of environmental pollution, you immediately changed the topic discussion for the prompt, which indicates that you did not understand the prompt requirements. This in turn, will result in a low to failing score in the task accuracy portion of the band score since you displayed reasons for the examiner to believe that you did not understand the prompt. Your essay will not score well in the overall scoring because the words that you use tend to be confusing which in turn confuses the reader regarding the discussion that you are presenting and the opinions that you have. It causes stress which will also result in an overall low score in terms of the remaining band criteria. I don't think that you can get a score higher than 3 or 4 in the overall scoring process for the aforementioned reasons.
OP sumanmahajan 1 / 1  
Jan 23, 2017   #5
Thanks for the feedback, I have taken notes. They are of great help.

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