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IELTS: 'food, drink and tobacco' - statistic of expenditure graph


xizon7777 5 / 5 4  
Jul 22, 2014   #1
The given table has clearly compared the contribution of three different categories on national consumer expenditure amongst five countries in 2002.

It is clear that larger percentages of the expenditure were spent on food, drink and tobacco, whilst leisure and education accounted for only mere minorities. Interestingly, Spain had the lowest ratio for the latter.

As can be seen from the figures, cigarette, food and drink held the highest proportion of nearly one third in Turkey, which was almost doubled that in Sweden. Otherwise, spending roughly three out of ten of the expenses on the same category, Ireland ranked second. Simultaneously, Ireland came second in term of country spending least on leisure and education, that was just over a half as high as Turkey (2.21 percent and 4.35 percent respectively).

As referring to clothes and footwear, comprising exactly nine percent, it was more common in Italy than other countries. At the same time, Sweden was at the bottom of the list with only a tiny minority of 5.4 percent. Finally, clothing and footwear made up similar amounts of approximately 6.5 percent in three other countries, namely, Ireland, Spain and Turkey.



Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 22, 2014   #2
It is clear that larger percentages of the expenditure were spent on food, drink and tobacco, whilst leisure and education accounted for only mere minorities. Interestingly, Spain had the lowest ratio for the latter.

Overall, the category of food, drink and tobacco has recorded the highest percentage of expenditure while leisure and education has recorded the least percentage spending. Turkey has been the country that has recorded the highest in all three categories as against other four countries.

Well, I think you have done a good job. Good approach too :)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jul 22, 2014   #3
Well, I think you have done a good job. Good approach too :)

Yes, your approach seems to be fine with me too - Introduction, Overview ( overall idea of the image presentation without any details) and the Detailed paras. That is exactly what we keep suggesting others also to follow for this task. However, I like if you adopt a bit more formal approach that suits report writing as this task is meant to assess your report writing capabilities. For example;

It is clear that larger percentages of the expenditure were spent on food, drink and tobacco, whilst leisure and education accounted for only mere minorities. Interestingly, Spain had the lowest ratio for the latter.

.... "It is clear that" sounds a bit informal. Keep reporting your observations and facts in a more reporting tone :)


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