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Food Production - is it important to know how our meal is produced? Or the taste only matters.


Aziz_Gibran 2 / 3 1  
Feb 23, 2017   #1
Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it cost.
How true is the statement? What influences people when they buy food.
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience?


are people interested in food ingredients?



Answer:
Nowadays, the perception of people about food has changed not only to fulfill basic needs but also as lifestyle. As a result, there are many considerations for people before they buy food and not everyone makes the same ways when they go to market for buy some foods.

Most commonly, the limitation of time to prepare meal is one of the factors people choose and purchase food. For example, for people who live in metropolitan city and have typical work that need rapid time, they depend on fast food or junk food as main meal all day. Even in some occasions, this people do not have opportunity to spend their break time to visit restaurants around their offices. They just call a certain restaurant to order their breakfast, lunch and even dinner instead of spending more time in kitchen for cooking some foods and dishes.

On the other hand, quality and taste are important for people as consideration to buy food. For instance, for people who have enough time for cooking, they will select the best quality of food materials and cooking tools. From the first step, hunting fresh vegetable and meat in the market, they will maximize their effort to buy the best food. Furthermore, they also use proper equipment and tools to cook as well as add special spices to produce high quality and tasty food.

Lifestyle, the other factor, also will affect people to consider how they choose food. For example, for people who are addicted to organic food, they will spend much more money just for buying organic product such as organic vegetables or organic fruits. In addition, for vegetarian who usually consider the freshness of vegetable, they also place the quality of vegetable as the main reason.

In conclusion, it seems that not all people consider cost as the only one reason why people decide to buy food. Even some people place on money as the top reason to get food, others have less attention in this thing, and they will voluntarily use some amount of their cash to buy food just to meet their satisfaction.
gcki 2 / 14 1  
Feb 23, 2017   #2
Hi @Aziz_Gibran!

Here's my take on your essay.

1. ... food has changed. It does not only to fulfill theirbasic needs but also affectsas oneslifestyle. As a result, there are many considerations for people people take a lot of considerations before they buy (...) for buy some foods. when choosing the food that they are going to consume.

2. Most commonly, the limitation of time to ... Lack of time to prepare a meal is one of the few reasons why people, especially those work and live in a metropolitan city, depends on fast food when it comes to their meals

For example, for people who live in metropolitan ... Even in some occasions In some instances, this people they do not have an opportunity to spend their break times to visit restaurants around their offices. This would cause them to just order from other restaurant or fast food joints since it will be more convenient for them. They just call a certain restaurant to order ...

3. For example, for people who are addicted to into organic food, they ...

4. The essay also does not agree nor disagrees with the given statement to be proven. You can focus on either agreeing to the statement by expounding the busy lifestyle of people or you can disagree to it by explaining that more people are now into a healthy lifestyle making them be more conscious about their food.
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Feb 23, 2017   #3
Aziz, it seems that you somehow understood the prompt but failed to properly discuss the requirements. The paraphrasing of the prompt topic is nowhere near the original topic, you did not discuss the extent of the truth behind the statement, and your experiences and other evidence presented did not align with the topic for discussion at all. What is evident in your discussion is that you responded to a totally different prompt topic. It is almost as if you decided to write a discussion on a topic you wanted to present, based upon the prompt topic provided. That is not how you write these essays. You have to fully understand the topic and the discussion requirements before you start even drafting a response. If you feel you do not truly understand what to do, then ask questions or clarifications from those who might be better at understanding the prompt. That is how you get better at writing. Do not be afraid to ask questions when you need to. That is how you learn and improve your learning / writing style.

It is because of these problems that I sadly give you an overall score of 2 for this test. I am extremely sad because in the final paragraph of your essay, you actually showed that you understood some of the prompt requirements. It is just that you did not properly represent the discussion based upon the prompt instructions.Please do your best to understand and respond to the next practice test that you will be doing. I can sense your potential to write a proper essay. The evidence is felt in some instances in this essay. You just need to make sure that you do it properly next time.


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