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TOEFL Essay - food (stand/restaurant or home)


ecmagalhaes 4 / 10  
Oct 1, 2010   #1
I will do my TOEFL exam at November 6th and i'm trying to improve my vocabulary and grammar skills!
i'll be glad if someone read and correct my essay. =)

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, it's very common to see in magazines, TV programs, and internet talking health. The main goal that comes is: 'you are what you eat'. I believe that eating food prepared at your own home is the better way to be sure of the quality of what you are eating.

Firstly, when you're going to prepare your own food you will make sure that the product will be at a valid data. Even with control of sanitary vigilance, it's important to take care of it, because it's very dangerous to consume old products. For example, in a conference of optics that I was presenting a paper, the buffet was serving sea food in that day: shrimps, oysters, lobster etc. My advisor loves to eat oysters. This type of food needs to be refrigerated until be served. I was walking down the hotel before my speech and I saw that the buffet was already there. At the dinner I told to my advisor that the oyster was spoiled, but he didn't hear what I sad and eat a lot. A couple hours after the dinner I look around and I did not see my advisor there; he was at the bathroom; when I came there he sad: 'I'm not feeling ok'. So, if you're going to eat this kind of food be sure that is refrigerated until the hour you're going to eat.

Secondly, by preparing your food and eating at home you will save some money. If you compare the same food that you buy at the market with the served at the restaurant you will be able to see the difference in price. Here in Brazil, a typical food that is very expensive in restaurants is cod. A plate just for one person costs in average one hundred dollars, conversely with this money you can buy 1 kilogram of cod, and so you can cook and make dinner for 4 to 5 persons.

Last but not least, in some cultures they believe that if you prepare your food with pleasure, love at food will taste even better. So, in this way I believe that preparing your food and eating at home is the better choice, and then after the meal you will be able to degust your own comfort being sure that you eat a healthy and priceless food.

jag 5 / 9  
Oct 2, 2010   #2
Hi,

Nowadays, it's very common to see in magazines, TV programs, and internet talking health. The main goal that comes is: 'you are what you eat'. I believe that eating food prepared at your own home is the better way to be sure of the quality of what you are eating.

This is my suggestion;
You are what you eat! This has become a commonly discussed topic today, by all types of media such as magazines, television and internet. I too believe that the food prepared at home is much superior to the food served at restaurents in terms of quality, cleanliness and nutrient value.
rosh 3 / 6  
Oct 2, 2010   #3
Firstly , when youyou're going to prepare your own food, you will make can be sure that the product will be at a valid data that you do not eat expired food. Even with control of sanitary vigilance, it's important to take care of it, because it's very dangerous to consume old products.(I think it's good if you re-write this sentence)

Also dont use the word "product" for food.
Priyanka3 6 / 17  
Oct 2, 2010   #4
Nowadays, it's very common to see in magazines, TV programs, and internet talkingtopics concerning health. The main goal that comes is: 'you are what you eat'. I believe that eating food prepared at your own home is the better way to be sure of the quality of what you are eating.clearly see the outstanding quality of your own food. Firstly, when you're going to prepare your own food you will make sure that the product will be at a valid data. (valid data isn't the correct word. I suggest using rosh's advice concerning that sentence)

Good luck!
OP ecmagalhaes 4 / 10  
Oct 2, 2010   #5
alahakon, roshan and priyanka thank for your suggestions!
i need to practise more and more to improve my vocabulary...

thks =)


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